Semite to Semite

Member since 2005 · Posted 23 May 2005 · Edited 24 May 2005 · 6 comments

Bloodshed spells the doom Of generations gone and to be Hatred seeths and boils over Poison ivy kills the olive tree Hey, don't we look the same We children of Abraham Praying to the same God Slaughtering the same lamb Deep dark eyes Under glamorous lashes Victims alike Of different fascists Crucify and curse And murder ourselves Even as we drink From the same wells Time to embrace Semite to semite And stop for good This endless fight Deep dark eyes Under glamorous lashes Victims alike Of different fascists Kill the cliche Undo the past Build a peace Built to last A dry desert home Where both tribes agree To honor and worship The other's dignity Deep dark eyes Under glamorous lashes Victims alike Of different fascists

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[7] wilco 23-May-05/8:40 PM Reply

I don't know that this is a concrete...I'm a fan of repetition to some extend but I think it's too much here. Try the "deep dark eyes part mybe every third or fourth stanza...

[n/a] PodPoet › wilco 23-May-05/8:58 PM Reply

Thanks, and I agree with you. Cut down on the "chorus" and I like it more. Thanks for sharing your thoughts.

[8] Dovina 24-May-05/11:26 AM Reply

You should set off the refrain some way, indented perhaps, Maybe call this a lyric. Most of this is good, but "worship" goes too far.

[n/a] PodPoet › Dovina 24-May-05/6:40 PM Reply

Thanks for your thoughts Dovina. Agreed, indenting the refrain looks & reads better. As for doing away with "worship," I feel strongly about keeping that word. I feel that only when Jews and Arabs go beyond respecting to actually loving each other as worthy people, will the nightmare end.

[8] Dovina › PodPoet 24-May-05/6:48 PM Reply

To honor The other's dignity is good. But "To honor and worship The other's dignity"? Nope, that goes too far in the direction of impossibility.

[7] wilco 25-May-05/6:26 PM Reply

The indentations are not needed. Also for someone who wants to kill the cliche, there's a lot of it here...maybe that's the point.