on Dancing on Glass by thepinkbunnyofdoom
9 Jan 2005, 4:41 PM
The images don't seem to be connected very well, but I liked the ending.
replying on Draw Me A Pretty Picture by cuddlytiger17
9 Jan 2005, 4:26 PM
lol now that was moving. Thanks. =)
on The Fear of Being and will not be forever by Prince of Void
8 Jan 2005, 3:11 PM
Some of these lines don't make sense at all...might want to edit some of your grammar and "fury" is with one "r"...
on Existential questions by kawakurdi
8 Jan 2005, 3:05 PM
Interesting, but some of your rhymes are really forced.
on Over beast by Crakyamuni
4 Jan 2005, 6:24 PM
Great! The first line lures you in. There's just something about this that's all-consuming. A life's lesson here summed up in a few lines.
on distance by Crakyamuni
4 Jan 2005, 6:18 PM
I liked this. People too often want things just for material possessions, or because someone else expects them to desire it. Once again, good write.
on cut yourself by Crakyamuni
4 Jan 2005, 6:10 PM
Well I was reading through some of your poems that I'd already previously voted for, and I definitely know why I gave this one a 9. It's a shame that I didn't leave a comment though.
The lines:
"cutting out the unwanted pieces of palpatating veins
there never was a clever way to reinvent my name
nothing normal, acting out, borderline no fucking doubt"
are great. For lack of better words, I really liked them. lol. It's blunt and to the point. Good write.
The lines:
"cutting out the unwanted pieces of palpatating veins
there never was a clever way to reinvent my name
nothing normal, acting out, borderline no fucking doubt"
are great. For lack of better words, I really liked them. lol. It's blunt and to the point. Good write.
on Cigarettes and Masturbation by Lifeboatman
4 Jan 2005, 2:50 PM
So very true. The worlds become a sad place...
replying on Emotions Color Your Thoughts by cuddlytiger17
6 Dec 2004, 7:36 PM
I think you can make it whatever "colour" you'd like.
replying on Emotions Color Your Thoughts by cuddlytiger17
5 Dec 2004, 3:46 PM
Thank you. And I have no idea. If I figure it out, I'll let you know. :p
on Love Bruises by Jezabele-In-Hell
26 Nov 2004, 8:23 PM
I guess I can understand why you want the bruises to remain as long as possible; to serve as a reminder, proof. But like Dovina said, it's too plain.
replying on Draw Me A Pretty Picture by cuddlytiger17
4 Nov 2004, 1:31 PM
Well thank you very much. I honestly have to say that people like you, who've criticized what I wrote in the past, have inspired me to better the way I write. I still have a long ways to go, lol, but I guess I am getting a bit better. Thanks again. :)
replying on Draw Me A Pretty Picture by cuddlytiger17
3 Nov 2004, 8:02 PM
I guess I should take that as a compliment...lol. You seem shocked that I've actually "gotten better." haha.
replying on Draw Me A Pretty Picture by cuddlytiger17
3 Nov 2004, 6:25 PM
hehe thank you. :)
replying on Social Awarness by midnitebeauty101
29 Oct 2004, 5:28 PM
Though I see where you're coming from, a synonym for issue is problem. Teen suicide is a problem, and it is sad that its so common. "What would be sad would be if teen suicide WASN'T an issue." <--With issue meaning problem, you're saying that teens committing suicide is a good thing. lol before you criticize others make sure you know what you're saying.
on Social Awarness by midnitebeauty101
29 Oct 2004, 5:21 PM
Sad write.
You spelled "awareness" wrong in your title, and I believe you meant "of" not "if" in the third stanza.
You spelled "awareness" wrong in your title, and I believe you meant "of" not "if" in the third stanza.
replying on Cold Indifference by cuddlytiger17
22 Oct 2004, 1:55 PM
What's the dots? I'm taking its a good thing seeing how you gave me a 9. I'm still curious though.
replying on I hate Haiku's. Bombs away. by Rollsoftoiletpaper
17 Oct 2004, 1:57 PM
All right, I don't know what your problem is, but it doesn't take a genious to click on the link that says "View voting details."
replying on Fast Dreams by cuddlytiger17
17 Oct 2004, 1:48 PM
As in a nightmare? If you're telling me you've never had a dream in which you were running, well then I'd say I have a hard time believing you.
on I hate Haiku's. Bombs away. by Rollsoftoiletpaper
16 Oct 2004, 8:40 PM
lol nice. ur an ass. haha.