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cut yourself (Free verse) by Crakyamuni Is it innapropriate to cut this ill will from the flesh
surging waves of losing pressed, skin, and wind, flowered dress
take this out and show it off,ignorance is bliss
I scoff at this malnutritioned kiss
cutting out the unwanted pieces of palpatating veins
there never was a clever way to reinvent my name
nothing normal, acting out, borderline no fucking doubt
Border brother in their eyes
Border herders, they despise, kill the unique and steal their eyes
to reinvent our names in lies
hedonism is a lie, In all this friend I do despise
the bloodletting wishes in your eyes
and misconstrued life upon her thighs.
Up the ladder:
Dirge
Down the ladder:
Club
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 5.5
Posted: July 20, 2003 12:54 PM PDT; Last modified: July 21, 2003 11:31 AM PDTWeighted score: 5.134471 Overall Rank: 5563 The following users have marked this poem on their favorites list:
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Jeremi B. Handrinos @ 24.126.113.154
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20-Jul-03/2:42 PM
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And there "naver" will be. Sounds like a lovely trip to the barber.
I would suggest correcting the typo for better votes.
Well I was reading through some of your poems that I'd already previously voted for, and I definitely know why I gave this one a 9. It's a shame that I didn't leave a comment though.
The lines: "cutting out the unwanted pieces of palpatating veins there never was a clever way to reinvent my name nothing normal, acting out, borderline no fucking doubt" are great. For lack of better words, I really liked them. lol. It's blunt and to the point. Good write. 231 view(s)
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