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cut yourself (Free verse) by Crakyamuni

Is it innapropriate to cut this ill will from the flesh surging waves of losing pressed, skin, and wind, flowered dress take this out and show it off,ignorance is bliss I scoff at this malnutritioned kiss cutting out the unwanted pieces of palpatating veins there never was a clever way to reinvent my name nothing normal, acting out, borderline no fucking doubt Border brother in their eyes Border herders, they despise, kill the unique and steal their eyes to reinvent our names in lies hedonism is a lie, In all this friend I do despise the bloodletting wishes in your eyes and misconstrued life upon her thighs.

cuddlytiger17 4-Jan-05/6:10 PM
Well I was reading through some of your poems that I'd already previously voted for, and I definitely know why I gave this one a 9. It's a shame that I didn't leave a comment though.
The lines:
"cutting out the unwanted pieces of palpatating veins
there never was a clever way to reinvent my name
nothing normal, acting out, borderline no fucking doubt"
are great. For lack of better words, I really liked them. lol. It's blunt and to the point. Good write.




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