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Club

Member since 2003 · Posted 30 Jul 2003 · Edited 25 Sep 2003 · 7 comments

Club Nought but the rattling of drinks and the chitchat of guests. The gentle swaying of cords, blinds fully raised Flowers, white, vibrate with us all Two lapshades join in the fun Another just like ours, passes on our left As our forward facing view shows blue Two shades mix, a coastline appears Cliffs, and a beach fade into view, horses all around, appear and disappear A beacon too, and a ship Obscured by window frame, now appears Gentle rise, gentle fall Sway to the left, sway to the right. A village appears, upon the land white houses mixed in with the brown "A sight to see" says the club class waitress But I am not here I am gone

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[1] poetandknowit 30-Jul-03/3:02 PM Reply

Love the word chitchat (I think it is one word), but the rest of the poem is rather trite. You need many more beers before you can write about bars with any meaning. Quit doing ecstasy; it is bad for you.

[n/a] Beseech › poetandknowit 1-Aug-03/7:39 AM Reply

You FUCKER! Its a club LOUNGE!!! NOT a bar! I got bored on the ferry to france. I know its shite. I dont do ecstasy like you. Im not a sheep shagging whore fucking shit pile

[6] ?-Dave_Mysterious-? › Beseech 25-Sep-03/4:32 AM Reply

Was there any lounge jazz playing?

[n/a] Beseech › ?-Dave_Mysterious-? 25-Sep-03/11:44 AM Reply

fraid not :( sorry dude

[6] ?-Dave_Mysterious-? › Beseech 25-Sep-03/3:40 PM Reply

Denied!

[n/a] horus8 › poetandknowit 2-Aug-03/12:00 PM Reply

Yep, I'm with you on that observation, pk.

Also, Beseech, rattle is only "wrattle", if you've got the vulva of a lamb, but the head of a jackass.

[7] irishfolksuicide 25-Sep-03/4:28 AM Reply

pretty enough, well put together.

Not sure there is much in the way of insight to grab the writer though