poemranker ::Draw Me A Pretty Picture by cuddlytiger17

DetailsThe poem, its numbers, and the conversation.

Free verse № 114526

Draw Me A Pretty Picture

Member since 2004 · Posted 29 Oct 2004 · 8 comments

You beg for a new beginning; A bottle of white-out To erase the pain you’ve endured. You long for a light bright enough To dim the shadows that linger At the corners of your eyes Pulling your smile downwards, Signifying your slow demise. But your yawns become weaker As weariness sets in Yet you still cry out- Reaching, reaching, reaching… But not quite touching. Seeking a savior, To locate your lost soul And a sense of being A sense of importance A sense of hope Through these shaded days. You’re asking for my help, So I’ll do the best I can I'm handing you a crayon, Now color yourself out of your past And draw me a pretty picture.

Rate it

0 is the worst, 10 the best. Pick a number, add a comment if you like, then send it. Keys: 0–9 pick, Enter sends.

mean 7.83 weighted 5.76 rank 1794 views 226 View voting details →

6 votes so far. Yours would make 7.6 votes so far

A favorite of sliver, thepinkbunnyofdoom.

8 comments

[10] sliver 2-Nov-04/8:56 PM Reply
DAMN Cuddly one. Tis the best yet, in my humble opinion. A light bright enough? BRILLIANT! Yes!
[n/a] cuddlytiger17 › sliver 3-Nov-04/6:25 PM Reply
hehe thank you. :)
[7] wilco 3-Nov-04/7:10 PM Reply
If anyone else wrote this I'd probably just pas it by or write something mean, but I seem to have a soft spot in my heart for you cuddlytiger17. The reason I guess is that you keep trying and, God bless you, you're actually getting better
[n/a] cuddlytiger17 › wilco 3-Nov-04/8:02 PM Reply
I guess I should take that as a compliment...lol. You seem shocked that I've actually "gotten better." haha.
[7] wilco › cuddlytiger17 3-Nov-04/8:32 PM Reply
That is because most people don't get any better. They just keep churning out the same crappy poems forever. And yes, you should take it as a compliment.
[n/a] cuddlytiger17 › wilco 4-Nov-04/1:31 PM Reply
Well thank you very much. I honestly have to say that people like you, who've criticized what I wrote in the past, have inspired me to better the way I write. I still have a long ways to go, lol, but I guess I am getting a bit better. Thanks again. :)
[10] thepinkbunnyofdoom 9-Jan-05/4:20 PM Reply
Damn, what I wouldn't give for a drunken down on his luck suicidal wino right now, a crayon, and some extra copies of this this to draw on the back of in case he has a couple of buddies :0

In other words, very moving

<3 Jason
[n/a] cuddlytiger17 › thepinkbunnyofdoom 9-Jan-05/4:26 PM Reply
lol now that was moving. Thanks. =)