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Foie Gras (Sonnet) by Christof Ring damn you ring and let it be
Some telesales rep or marketeer
And let me pick up the funnel and pour
My warm scorn into their captive ear
Until they burst or I burst first.
I'm grey before my day and lumpen from fear
That I'll never again strike the winning runs
Or shag the blonde I once lived near.
There's me and my office and the filleted men
Who work for me, shrink from me, call me their friend
And the blank night sky where there once was a screen
For the playing and playing of favourite dreams
There's me and my office and the pulsing release
Of the torture of geese.
Up the ladder:
Victoria Applesmack and the Easy to Clean Wonder-Spleen
Down the ladder:
Eleven Reasons For Love
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Posted: June 21, 2007 5:18 AM PDT; Last modified: June 21, 2007 5:18 AM PDTWeighted score: 5.7620006 Overall Rank: 1795 Comments:
All capitol letters should be demoted immediately, and only given the right to become bigger when requested. Don't be so lazy as to let Word write your lines for you! This is the third or fourth poem I've come across today with idleness stamped all over it. Switch to notepad, take back control...OK that said this is fabulous, loving it. A little jumpy but still full marks for writing with substance.
lots of good stuff here: "warm scorn". "lumpen from fear", "filleted men". is it a British saying to call a telephone handset a funnel or is that an expression of the poem. if the latter, another good one.
what i get from this is a lonely businessman, pining for his youth with drive-in theatres, sports victories, and of course, shagging. all the trappings of success without any real substance. didnt quite get the torture of geese unless it is a reference to hearing a novice playing bagpipes.
The 'funnel' is my own term, glad you like it! And the geese are referring back to the title - they are the telesales people being filled up until they burst, like geese fattened up to make pate de foie gras.
A fine write--paints an excellent picture of a Scrooge like character.
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Love the torture of geese. Glorious.