Re: The Hand of God by Christof |
29-Aug-02/9:47 AM |
Yes my email is posted - send me a message if you like. I'll sort out a little file of things for you tomorrow if you'd like it. Right now I have to go - I'm at work and work's ended, so I'm off for some food. But thanks for all your support, it's great.
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Re: The Hand of God by Christof |
29-Aug-02/9:49 AM |
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regarding some deleted poem... |
30-Aug-02/1:23 AM |
Actually, there are loads of birds aren't there? Cripes. Birds are a big Thomas thing - the reference in the first stanza is a deliberate allusion to his 'Adlestrop' - but perhaps I have over-egged the bird pie somewhat.
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Re: "The title is overused!" by vulcan |
30-Aug-02/2:29 AM |
Section 3 is pretty damn amazing. The rest of this is great too - you are a psychosexual maelstrom, and no mistake. All power to whichever elbow most suits.
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Re: Wildcatting The Canard: by horus8 |
30-Aug-02/2:36 AM |
I think i can see what you're getting at Mr Horus - this big wheel ride down Mt Baldy past L Cohen I can see - but I don't see how all these bits fit together as one poem. I think a lot of your poems are part of the same patchwork of thoughts and crazinesses that run through your head and for that reason are all of a piece and wildly variant at the same time. You do mad things to my mind, my friend. I think I'm getting close to what you're on about and then it veers off at the last minute. Burp.
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Re: It was Pity killed God-Nietzsche by vulcan |
30-Aug-02/2:39 AM |
What you did for Freud in 'The title is over-used!' you do for the dear Lord here. Marv'lous.
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Re: Dignity by kthulah |
30-Aug-02/2:49 AM |
ZZinnia and God's wife, I've been reading your comments and you've both spoken a lot of sense. There's no reason why marriage shouldn't work but perhaps the parameters of marriage should be modified in the modern age. Life obviously doesn't work out in the way our great-great-grandparents thought it would.Why do we push ourselves into these boxes and assume that we will only ever love one person? Zzinnia, I really feel for you, I understand completely how this has happened to you because it's happened to me too.
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Re: regrets by kthulah |
30-Aug-02/2:51 AM |
I know exactly what this is about and the last stanza says it with pith and venom - how stupid we all can be.
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regarding some deleted poem... |
30-Aug-02/3:21 AM |
This isn't as good as your other stuff, though the feeling is geuine the expression is a bit hackneyed and the ending is melodramatic.
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Re: Meta by nentwined |
30-Aug-02/3:26 AM |
Now you can see why Plato got those terrible headaches. I wish my sane mind could resist this, but I think it's great.
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30-Aug-02/3:40 AM |
Snapshots of memories, vivid and visceral. I really feel this in the belly. Well done
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Re: Cancer Haikus by poetandknowit |
30-Aug-02/4:46 AM |
#50 absolutely rocks. These are great. They could have been either flippant or maudlin, but they tread the perfect line in between. 10/10
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Re: Fallen Leaves From a Tree by kristenk69lover |
30-Aug-02/5:41 AM |
I like your central image and I think if you concentrated on that without resorting to explanation e.g. 'It's the same with life' this would eb much better. Trust your images to be themselves, you shouldn't have to spell it out. You could have said the same with far more impact in a third of the lines. The ending has a gracefulness that I like though.
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Re: Thousand Tears by kristenk69lover |
30-Aug-02/5:43 AM |
I like that Sara Teasdale poem, very concise and true. Thanks Lenore! It's what we should all be aiming for - take note Kristen!
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Re: Senses of Time by searching |
30-Aug-02/5:47 AM |
Yep that last line is a killer. Belies everything that goes before it and is good for that reason.
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Re: An Introduction by 1Sapphire1 |
30-Aug-02/7:41 AM |
This convinces me. It's funny, then it's funny again, then it's hollow and sad. Wahey!
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Re: Fragments by 1Sapphire1 |
30-Aug-02/7:46 AM |
I don't think this is sweet, it's a harsh and bitter - and it's good because of that. Very psychologically aware of what happens between two people in an unequal relationship. Yes indeedy.
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regarding some deleted poem... |
30-Aug-02/8:00 AM |
Cryptic and curt and I like it. If only life were really this arithmetical
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Re: affirmative action by thelonefrobros |
30-Aug-02/8:12 AM |
If you've turned your keyboard green there must be something very wrong with your genito-urinary tract. Take yourself to the clinic at once. What was the point of this?
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Re: Blinded by Your Kiss by ThoughtfulSoul |
30-Aug-02/8:17 AM |
I know the feeling exactly. I wish you'd gone for a more regular rhyme scheme or something to tie it all together, but I get the message loud and clear.
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