regarding some deleted poem...	28-Aug-02/7:55 AM
Yes, I was only being flippant. I can never resist a cheap gag. And your syntactical inversion, while technically and gramatically correct, isn't very graceful. Have you tried saying it out loud? Yes you provide the correct stresses and beats, but the phrase is galumphing on the tongue. Anyway, I would argue that the limerick is more anapaestic than this (e.g.'There once was a young man from Bude'by the limerick master himself, Mr Lear - you'd have to mangle your first line a bit to get these stresses, because the words ' three years' automatically suggest a long trochaic sound). God's wife may or may not have read any poetry from before 1824, but you obviously aren't acquainted with Robert Frost's 'sound of sense', which makes my point much more clearly and is a damn sight closer to 2002 than 1824 is.
regarding some deleted poem...	28-Aug-02/8:55 AM
GW do you mean me or Dark Angel? Maybe I'm getting paranoid and need lithium
Re: The Hand of God by Christof	29-Aug-02/1:14 AM
That's very kind Mrs God. I've had odd pieces published here and there in small mags in Britain, but certainly not in book form. No one wnats my stuff enough! But I'm glad you do. Thank you.
Re: Too far by heroditus	29-Aug-02/2:34 AM
I like this though I'm not convinced by the ending. Good rhythmic beat and central image.
Re: 22nd Anniversary by Frass	29-Aug-02/6:36 AM
This is just lovely. I don't know what's in that Blue Ridge Air but I'd like some
regarding some deleted poem...	29-Aug-02/7:49 AM
This is certainly deranged, but I think it's quite funny.
regarding some deleted poem...	29-Aug-02/7:55 AM
Though credit where credit's due - 'keybored' was originally somebody else's word. Can't remember who. Frass? Nentwined? Can't remember... but I do remember commenting on it and saying I didn't like it, so there.
Re: Elephant To A Man by nonee	29-Aug-02/7:58 AM
It's an interesting angle, but the u's are horrible. So is 'million/billion years' - decide which.
Re: Petrarchan Sonnet about Love by emilyowey	29-Aug-02/8:06 AM
I like this - it's good to see old forms being used, and the meditation on love is also a very fitting thing for a sonnet. The 'to've' I don't like - shoe-horning it in to keep the metre - but apart from that this is really good.
regarding some deleted poem...	29-Aug-02/8:14 AM
Thanks for the explanation. I sort of guessed it must be something like that. Do I believe? Not really. But then, I have no imagination. I just assume that peole evolved from some primeval swamp (about which we know nothing) and now wear suits and live in houses and get on with things and the governments are full fo smiling people who just want us to have fun and ice cream. The truth is out there somewhere but I expect it's very boring. Good God where did that all come from? By the way did you see my poem 'To Edward Thomas' - in commemoration of my finishing my PhD thesis on him today. Yes, this very day. Hoorah!
Re: Luna Moth by razorgrin	29-Aug-02/8:23 AM
But it's going off to its death! How cruel!
Re: Louder by Venus	29-Aug-02/8:26 AM
I could not resist the whole canoe/pepper/pea brain moment...how delicious
Re: Wildcatting The Canard: by horus8	29-Aug-02/8:33 AM
This always seems to happen...I really like the first two stanzas of this, I like the structure that reverses itself and some of your descriptions (desecrations?) are spot on - Family, for instance, and Alzheimer's. It's powerful stuff. But then it just seems to go mad and I lose interest. Sorry.
regarding some deleted poem...	29-Aug-02/8:36 AM
I quite like your silver moon refrain, but I think this could do with being shorter and less rhetorical. Give us a sense of this person and what they've done for you, and then we'll feel it more.
Re: Until Then by Katie	29-Aug-02/8:40 AM
This is pure escapism, but it is lovely and wistful
regarding some deleted poem...	29-Aug-02/9:04 AM
Do you not have Biros in the States? Wow, I took them for granted. The pewits is a specific Thomas thing - his poem 'Pewits' has them flying over the land the lords of all they survey, both earth and sky - and the fact that it is planes, not birds, that do this, without shattering the strong vision of England that Thomas had in his pre-plane days, inspires me to lve him and therefore go to the archive in Cardiff. Presto!
regarding some deleted poem...	29-Aug-02/9:10 AM
I can't say what I like best about him really - I think it's his refusal to go for easy answers. Everything's always blurred, neither one thing nor the other. He really understands his own confusion and see that life is lived not in absolutes but in conditionals. But he believes 100% in the power of poetry to illuminate and transform. he's great. Read the man!
regarding some deleted poem...	29-Aug-02/9:24 AM
He was a big mate of Robert Frost - might be the best way of first approaching him in the US, I don't know how well known he is in his own right out there. I hope you'll love him anyway. I think he and I are quite similar.
regarding some deleted poem...	29-Aug-02/9:34 AM
Exactly! Couldn't tell what England is precisely, but when i look out at the land from a train window and look at those gentle hills and the scudding clouds and hear the wind, I know it's worth something. And I bet you are surrounded by biros - they always have a little hole in the side
Re: The Hand of God by Christof	29-Aug-02/9:40 AM
If I ever get published, I'm getting you to write the blurb on the back.