regarding some deleted poem...	30-Jan-04/6:33 AM
What the hell?
Re: Turncoat by poetandknowit	30-Jan-04/7:41 AM
Is this about Ovid? I like it a lot. Come back poetandknowit, you've not been on the ranker for a long while.
Re: Jade Teacup by heartlessempath	17-Feb-04/4:14 AM
Get rid of the last line - it's unnecessary.
Re: So Defined Is He! by jasondingus	17-Feb-04/4:18 AM
Sort out these commas - you shouldn't have one after Webster, for example. And I'm confused by 'as' - you're not comparing him to anything, you're just making statements. The descriptions are nice though, and so are the rhymes.
regarding some deleted poem...	17-Feb-04/7:31 AM
Nice
Re: Freud suggested that I commit murder. by DreamerSupreme	17-Feb-04/8:58 AM
Well, it's sort of clever and witty, but in the end, does it really say anything worth saying? This feels like it should be a scene in an angst-ridden indie comedy film, like Donnie Darko without the rabbit.
Re: The daisy-chain girl by richa	17-Feb-04/8:59 AM
Very pretty. I don't get the ancient Rome bit either - is this an erudite allusion? If so, please enlighten us, I'm intrigued!
Re: La Belle Epoque by andrewjthomas	17-Feb-04/9:04 AM
Holy crikey this is hard work, like a 21st century Arthur Hugh Clough. I think there's a novelist in you waiting to get out, rather thsn a poet.
Re: Gone Wrong by XpunkXgirlX	17-Feb-04/9:08 AM
1. I'm sorry, this poem has contravened that 1997 European Directiev outlawing the rhyming of 'bad/mad/sad' for at least another 4 centuries. 2. Honestly, there are plenty more fish in the sea.
Re: Wanderlust (1st Draft) by andrewjthomas	17-Feb-04/9:11 AM
This is loads better, evocative, precise, yearning and not prosaic at all (if still a little verbose).
Re: Pre Dance Jitters by Butterflywriter	17-Feb-04/9:16 AM
Rockmage do you give everything a ten? Even when something is full of cliches, you praise it. Do you have any sense of critical distinction? Does this poem really make you feel the fear, terror etc of the narrator? If it did, it would deserve a ten. But it DOESN'T.
Re: Las Gaviotas by Bachus	8-Apr-04/7:03 AM
It's been on the site so long and I've never seen it. t's great, really beautiful and delicate. This is tops.
regarding some deleted poem...	8-Apr-04/7:06 AM
She's a college graduate? Oh my great God. I thought she was about 12 and therefore forgivable. I suppose the word 'meta-relationship' gives away the fact that she's had some education. The question is, what the hell has she done with it?
regarding some deleted poem...	28-May-04/7:40 AM
Nice try at a villanelle. But please find another subject. I only log in about once a month and there's always a new poem by you on the same damn subject.
regarding some deleted poem...	28-May-04/7:42 AM
This is an improvement. Nice observations and a feeling of emptiness at the end that is very well evoked.
Re: My deepest thoughts by poetandknowit	28-May-04/7:50 AM
You posted this on my 30th birthday and very fitting it seems.
Re: untitled :( by XxRuby_KillsXx	26-Aug-04/7:25 AM
Supreme Dreamer says it all except that the last line in bathetic - that weak final rhyme lets the whole structure down. Also ;It could of been; - 'it could have been'. 'Of' is not a part of a verb and never will be. Jeez, I'm sorry you're taking all this crap over your grammar, but I think it's because people see something they like in your writing and really want you to get better.
Re: Swimming in Space & Fishing for the Luridness Monster by SupremeDreamer	26-Aug-04/7:30 AM
I'm sorry, I know a lot of peole think really highly of your stuff but I find this verbose, navel-gazing, self-regarding and, worst of all, unmusical and unrhythmic. This sounds like prose and rather than expressing your 'insanity' merely goes through the motions of explaining it; the ultimate effect is extremely unconvincing.
Re: Where Have Equality Slipped Off To? by TLRufener	26-Aug-04/7:34 AM
I admire the spirit behind this but the expression is too simplistic and cliched to really make me feel the force of the poem. This states a case rather than creating an imaginative response to inequality; perhaps you could try creating a character or a voice that expresses what you mena without resorting to bald declarations?
Re: Beached (Or how I learned to give up the day) by Jeremi B. Handrinos	26-Aug-04/7:36 AM
Apart from the last two lines, which I don't like because they seem over-sentimental and Romantic, this is ace. teh first stanza could be a poem by itself.