Re: remnants by crin	16-Oct-02/2:31 AM
I quite like the internal rhymes you use. The progression of the poem is somewhat mysterious, but perhaps that is fitting as it ends in a surprise (but is 'pleasant' too weak a word?)
Re: Jerk ?? Circle by horus8	16-Oct-02/2:35 AM
Top T action in the first stanza, and good reference to the spork, an underrated utensil. Your eye for detail never fails.
Re: Homemade Greetings by jessicazee	16-Oct-02/2:42 AM
Harsh to all card makers! I have never before considered the ethics of greeting cards - this is sharp.
Re: On a chill morning by razorgrin	16-Oct-02/7:39 AM
And you call my poem chilly? This is icy and sinister.
Re: I am Cuba by cacophony	16-Oct-02/7:56 AM
I think you should cut the last four lines - 'wrote' just isn't grammatical here and spoils the verse, although you need it for your rhyme - and anyway, the first stanza is really strong on its own.
regarding some deleted poem...	16-Oct-02/8:17 AM
This is more resigned than your poems usually are, not that this is a bad thing. Acceptance, I think, is what you're talking about here, the hopelessness of hope.
Re: Persephone by Lynn	16-Oct-02/8:24 AM
This is a great updating, and very funny. Well done.
Re: Confessor's Nightcap by Limness	17-Oct-02/1:28 AM
I don't know what it is - maybe it's the time of morning - but I think this is hilarious. You have a sly style and I like it. 'If ears retained'etc is genius.
Re: The Devil Made Her Do It by Limness	17-Oct-02/1:31 AM
My limited knowledge of tarot doesn't help me here, but I think she's decided to cool off her relationship with some chap? what is the significance if inverting the last card? Pleasedo explain because I think it'll clear up the poem for me - it has your usual grace and swing.
regarding some deleted poem...	17-Oct-02/1:32 AM
Why have you resubmited this? Has it changed? I still love it.
regarding some deleted poem...	17-Oct-02/1:33 AM
I still love this too - what's up with the resubmissions?
Re: On a chill morning by razorgrin	17-Oct-02/4:03 AM
What is this mad pedantry about cars/brooms whatever? Who cares? This poem would go on forever if there was a description of every single detail and by the end of it the reader would want to baste himself in his own tears of frustration and rage. Leave it as it is Razorgrin!
regarding some deleted poem...	17-Oct-02/4:06 AM
As someone who falls over at least once a day, I can literally feel your pain.
Re: Snow-White by vulcan	17-Oct-02/5:55 AM
I'm taking it that the 'Sole' refers to the solitary?
Re: The Moment of Elevation by vulcan	17-Oct-02/5:57 AM
I liek the idea of the union of Man and Nature even in destruction. That is truly Shelleyan. You do capture the Romantics very well.
Re: At my grandmother's aging sight by vulcan	17-Oct-02/5:58 AM
I think you keep on resubmitting this one - you must be doing edits I haven't noticed. The ending in particular is very strong.
Re: Bleeding V2 by INTRANSIT	18-Oct-02/1:54 AM
I like the fact that you follow the fishing metaphor all the way through now, and I like the approaching menace of the bears at the end.
Re: Stamp by worldsofwar	18-Oct-02/1:55 AM
'generally a cheap tramp'?
Re: Ode to Larkbeat Twoshoes by Nicholas Jones	18-Oct-02/6:09 AM
I liek the reminiscence and the ending of the poem, but i don't know about the beginning - maybe it seems a bit wordy, and I don't quite see the connection between Vick and you becoming a 'person you can love'. The conversational tone of the rest of it is ace though. And Larkbeat Twoshoes is a fantastic name.
Re: the girl what gave scott the look by UAFANTHORPEY	18-Oct-02/6:12 AM
Your mate Scott is an idiot.