Re: Faith by INTRANSIT	21-Oct-02/6:05 AM
Yep I think that's better - you're no longer talking down to the fire but you are urging it on its ambition.
Re: d e e p e r by daniella	21-Oct-02/6:10 AM
I've just realised I forgot to vote on this - sorry! Here you are...
Re: nothing could by nentwined	21-Oct-02/6:20 AM
Cunningly funny
Re: Hunt by cobalt	21-Oct-02/7:28 AM
'awaits the fall' is good - it makes me think if fall of man, as if something less than innocent is going on which he is too blind to see.
Re: Hedgehog's Dilemma by Shin-Bojangles	21-Oct-02/8:06 AM
Er, what? I'm baffled. Perhaps you had to be there.
regarding some deleted poem...	21-Oct-02/8:10 AM
'There is abundance enough to last the season'? Oh, i don't know. I think the last line reads OK as it is, I didn't pick up on it as Zzinnia did.
Re: requiem for an ex-girlfriend by natalie	22-Oct-02/1:15 AM
I like th fact that the jealousy is still the most prevalent emotion, even at the end. But it's mixed in with shick, guilt and regret as well. That's a lot to cover in a short space.
Re: A love of the midlands by ==Doylum	22-Oct-02/1:18 AM
Where are you coming from? Telford should be European City of Culture. It's got bridges, after all. And a tree.
Re: Stockport by Nicholas Jones	22-Oct-02/4:51 AM
Excellent detail about the fashions of the 90s, and a great mordant ending. This is one of your toppermost.
regarding some deleted poem...	22-Oct-02/4:52 AM
Last line- perfect. Tinkering does pay off.
Re: she wonders, by <~>	22-Oct-02/4:59 AM
I've come back to this. Will he dare? He would have to, wouldn't he? Or what kind of a man is he?
regarding some deleted poem...	22-Oct-02/7:35 AM
Break the cycle if you can, don't let yourself be used. A horrible situation
Re: The Canvassers by Nicholas Jones	23-Oct-02/1:30 AM
I like the sense of compromise that comes over in this. I wonder if it should be 'On streets' not 'By streets' - do you say that doors are 'by' streets? Dunno. I'm a pedant. I like the 'metaphysical concrete dreams'.
Re: The Dreamer by Nicholas Jones	23-Oct-02/1:33 AM
Good to see another sonnet from you - you handled it well in 'The Canvassers' and also in this. This is more Keatsian as well in its self-analysis and fear.
Re: Mystery on the Bridge by vulcan	23-Oct-02/1:35 AM
This is very tender and I like the rhetorical flourish of the last couplet.
Re: Strong by little_angel_maria	23-Oct-02/6:04 AM
But Maria does have a point - it's OK to dislkie someone's poem but people do go a bit crzy with abuse. That's just not necessary. AFter all, a person's only written a poem you don't like, they haven't petrol-bombed your house and drowned your kittens in a vat of teir own urine. But maybe I'm just saying this because Ealing isn't far from my home and I don't want Maria and Blade coming over to whack me.
regarding some deleted poem...	23-Oct-02/6:05 AM
This is rather amusing.
regarding some deleted poem...	23-Oct-02/6:08 AM
It is indeed frivolous and arch, but a bit too long. It's like Oscar Wilde after one creme de menthe too many.
regarding some deleted poem...	23-Oct-02/6:12 AM
I like this - your verse is very musical. All your poetry has this precious quality; I think that you probably spend a lot of time polishing your words. Perhaps too much? It would be nice to see your verse breathe a bit more. Nonetheless, this is impressive.
regarding some deleted poem...	23-Oct-02/6:15 AM
Jesus, by the time I'd read all the comments I'd forgotten what the poem was about. So I reread... good Viking stuff. May you bestirde Hrothgar, and all that.