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Strong (Free verse) by little_angel_maria
I wont let you bring me down, I wont let you cuss me, I wont let you ruin my life, I wont let you take away what i worked so hard to get, I wont let you ruin my life, Oh hell no! Because I'm strong, Oh yes! I am strong. I can make it i'm strong, Oh yes! Somehow I will make it on my own. I wont let you kill my inner self, I wont let you make me a scared freak, Oh hell no I won't, I'm strong and yes I can make it on my own. My friend blade will be there for me if things get tough, Oh yes I can make it, I wont let you say my poems are crap, I wont let you be rude to other people, I wont let you kill America, OH hell fuck no! I wont let you discriminate latinos or black people too. Because i am Maria and I am strong

Up the ladder: How I Got Laid
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Arithmetic Mean: 1.375
Weighted score: 4.0250874
Overall Rank: 13355
Posted: October 21, 2002 7:13 AM PDT; Last modified: October 21, 2002 7:13 AM PDT
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[2] ==Doylum @ 62.6.76.26 | 21-Oct-02/9:18 AM | Reply
Well done!!!!!
Super!!!!
[n/a] little_angel_maria @ 213.122.160.11 > ==Doylum | 21-Oct-02/9:55 AM | Reply
thank you :)
[1] Tintagiles @ 207.179.137.231 | 21-Oct-02/10:05 AM | Reply
Can we discriminate against Asians? And don't forget that your dear friend blade will want to drink your blood. I fail to see how you will stop me from being rude, saying your poems are crap (this one actually seems a bit better than the others. Would almost make an amusing song, with some work), or killing America.
[n/a] little_angel_maria @ 213.122.160.11 > Tintagiles | 21-Oct-02/10:09 AM | Reply
listen can i ask you one question what the fuck is your problem why must you be so fucking rude why are you always on my case what the fuck have i done to you nothing ok !!! so for gods sake leave me Alone
[n/a] little_angel_maria @ 213.122.160.11 > little_angel_maria | 21-Oct-02/10:10 AM | Reply
AND NO YOU CANT DISCRIMINATE AGAINST ASIANS OK WHAT HAVE ASIANS DONE TO YOU
[1] Tintagiles @ 207.179.185.211 > little_angel_maria | 21-Oct-02/12:04 PM | Reply
My dear girl, I have no problem. (Apart from being insane, of course.) I am naturally rude. And I am not 'on your case', as you put it. I comment on many poems and am rude to many people if I consider their poetry to be bad. I have taken to going on once a day or so and voting and occasionally commenting on all the poems in the 'Recent' section. Your request that I leave you alone leads us to believe that we are not allowed to comment on your poetry unless we like it. Maria darling, the world doesn't work that way. By posting your poetry here, you are implicitely inviting us to comment, and if you cannot accept negative criticism without these various overreactions of yours, you are doomed. There is a pack of very nasty jackals on this site (i.e., when there's no one around to slaughter, we turn on each other). I happen to be a member of it. If you want to make your life as a poet (or at least a large part of it), you'll have to understand that it's impossible for everyone to like your poetry. there will be bad reviews. there will be laughter. Everyone on this site has received comments like that. Get used to it. If your only retaliation whenever someone doesn't like something you wrote is 'Why are you so fucking rude?' you won't go very far, I'm afraid. No one will listen to you or read you. I am not on your case because it's you: I genuinely don't find your poetry very good. If one fday you post a poem I truly like, I will say so, and mark you high, and say congratulations. But so far, you haven't.

I'm still amused that you always answer anything I say by 'Why the fuck are you rude?' You are apparently a very sensitive girl -- in the sense that it takes nothing to set you off. Your explosion on my comment on 'Daywalker' went far beyond the bounds of anything it merited -- and if I commented on this one as I did, it is because I confess I considered it something of a personal attack.

You see, girl, if I consider your poetry to be bad, I am not going to kneel down and sing an Ave Maria for you: I am going to express my opinion on the poem. That is the point of eing allowed to comment. Free speech and all. This particular poem amused me greatly. Let's dissect it, shall we?

It comes across as a whine, trying to convince yourself. 'I'm strong, I'm strong, I'm strong.' If you are strong, then you can accept criticism. You needn't blow up at every little comment. 'I won't let you cuss me' -- assuming, as most people will, that you're referring to us, I'm afraid it's a fact that you can't stop us. We are entities in cyberspace. We can say what we will. You can't track us down, and I doubt anyone but nentwined could stop us from doing anything. Sorry. If you can make it on your own, then why do you need all the flattery of those who like your poetry? 'Blade will be there for me if things get tough...' Whoo-pee. Good luck. What can I say, I consider Blade to be an utter idiot, probably wearing a plastic red-lined cape, fangs, and makeup two inches thick. And who probably hasn't had a bath in a month. And will be there for you if you let him drink your blood. Nice choice of friends. If that's the best you can do... And again, 'I won't let you...' -- in this forum, that is the equivalent of walking up to the White House and shouting 'I'm not gonna let you bomb Iraq, Bush. You're mean.'

As for my Asian comment, I simply found it extraordinarily funny that you'd stop us from discriminating against latinos and blacks, yet not mention anyone else. How terrible. The fact that you didn't notice it was a joke confirms my opinion that you have no sense of humour. And the final line: I'm shivering in my boots. Really. You're Maria. Nice to know you've got your name straight. Bra-vo.
[n/a] -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. @ 131.111.245.180 > Tintagiles | 21-Oct-02/12:11 PM | Reply
Don't listen to this bullshit, little_angel_maria. All I can say is that there is no excuse for rudeness, whether your poetry is bad or not. There are ways of expressing one's opinion on a piece, be it laudatory or otherwise, without resorting to malicious insults. Have a great time at poemeranker!
[n/a] UnityMitford @ 167.206.181.179 > -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. | 21-Oct-02/12:12 PM | Reply
DA, you're such a woman! don't drop the soap!
[0] razorgrin @ 192.197.142.14 | 22-Oct-02/11:36 AM | Reply
Hey look! Here is me, saying "your poems are crap". I guess now blade is going to come over to my house to suck me to death. This is a site where people comment on other people's poems. you know what? we even comment on the ones we don't like. If something is crap, we will say it is. And we are allowed to do so, even if some whiny, oversensitive bratling and her mall-goth friend don't want us to.
[1] Tintagiles @ 198.164.238.92 > razorgrin | 22-Oct-02/11:38 AM | Reply
Pssst... don't forget mall-goth's twin brother.
[n/a] jrtails @ 212.219.142.161 | 23-Oct-02/5:04 AM | Reply
For Christ sake girl, blade is a 17 yr old who is gay!!!. Very scared as you send him e-mail!!!, when he prefers the guys. There is no chance that you could "hook" up with him, as he's always "busy". By the way your poems are good but obsessive!!! Also further more your personal details sound like you want 2 b a tennage porn star
[n/a] Christof @ 195.172.133.226 | 23-Oct-02/6:04 AM | Reply
But Maria does have a point - it's OK to dislkie someone's poem but people do go a bit crzy with abuse. That's just not necessary. AFter all, a person's only written a poem you don't like, they haven't petrol-bombed your house and drowned your kittens in a vat of teir own urine. But maybe I'm just saying this because Ealing isn't far from my home and I don't want Maria and Blade coming over to whack me.
[n/a] Blade @ 212.219.142.161 > Christof | 24-Oct-02/8:29 AM | Reply
It can be arranged for a small fee!!!!!!
Oh and im not gay muther-fuckers!!
[n/a] Blade @ 212.219.142.161 > Blade | 24-Oct-02/8:31 AM | Reply
This is Blade's friend, Sadistic Hippy, and I have got to tell you that he isn't gay...honest
[n/a] little_angel_maria @ 213.122.36.159 > Blade | 26-Oct-02/5:03 AM | Reply
alright alright people calm down please!!! ok 1 BLADE IS NOT GAY AND LEAVE HIS FRIEND OUT OF THIS LEAVE THEM 2 ALONE THIS I SMY PROBLEM OK DONT BE RUDE TO THEM. THANK YOU DARKANGEL AND WHOEVER IS TRYING TO CALM YOU PEOPLE DOWN. god tingatingle thingy whatever you have some motherfucking nerve and christof me and blade would never hurt you lol i just want poeple to tell how my poems are if they suck well they suck but say it in a way i can try and fix em up not in a motherfucking rude way ok thank you
little_angel_maria, I'm not sure what fantastic delusions you're currently entertaining, but I'm not trying to calm anyone down. I'm trying to stir up trouble. Are you some sort of spastic or something?
[1] Tintagiles @ 198.164.250.181 > little_angel_maria | 26-Oct-02/7:13 PM | Reply
Yes, dear girl, I do have some nerve. I quite agree. And I don't doubt I'd make all my comments to your face, too. What does Christof have to do with any of this? And I'm sure Blade would never hurt me -- he'd only try to rip out my throat, bite out my vocal cords with his plastic fangs and all that. the problem is that he'd fail. Anyway, I shall be vaguely nice: I honestly think that you should not post your poetry. You are apparently too sensitive for it. I don't necessarily think you shouldn't write: but don't show it. It's not up to standards. For starters, get over your problem, with therapy or not. I do believe that writing these things has helped you a lot, 'Daniella' and 'Why?', for example. But as poetry, they are horrendous. I believe you wrote them under the full fling of the emotion, and that rarely makes for good poetry. Or, for that matter, good art. To make an analogy, when both Mozart and Tchaikovsky wrote their most celebratedly depressive and depressed works -- the 'Requiem' and the 'Symphonie Pathetique' respectively -- they were actually in very high spirits. And many of the most sunny works in existence were created during their creator's darkest days. Keep on writing these affairs of yours -- but perhaps when you are over your past you will be able to write about in a way that will not be a mind-boggling annoying stream of inanities. Get over it, then we can talk about how to fix your poems -- right now, I don't think there's any point, among other things because I can't see anything to save them, or very little, and secondly because you are apparently not mature enough to take criticism. For an example of what I mean about your poetry, go read God's Wife's poem 'No Angel Came' and then compare it to your 'Why?' The difference, and the deficiencies of your work, should be immediatedly apparent
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