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Mystery on the Bridge (Free verse) by vulcan
When in the fireplace the Composite Capital is all ablaze I think of her who now in my Fancy dwells. The calmness of this night suits these vigilant eyes Though in the niche nobody stands nobody smiles. For the knock of door,for that bright moment I wait But to the very morn Darkness is elate. Perhaps I find her still brooding over the brook But no by now the lusty Waves have raped her lovely look. What I told her I remember still word by word "For a touch of those sequestered lips I give up all the world. She did not move after I said this But to my fainted faculties spelled a hiss; Since then O longing hearts of men I think of you Who all must have lost something dear somewhere on the bridge.

Up the ladder: Children
Down the ladder: Boy I Know

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.0
Weighted score: 5.0
Overall Rank: 7538
Posted: October 23, 2002 1:09 AM PDT; Last modified: October 27, 2002 12:46 AM PDT
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Comments:
[8] Christof @ 195.172.133.226 | 23-Oct-02/1:35 AM | Reply
This is very tender and I like the rhetorical flourish of the last couplet.
[8] INTRANSIT @ 205.188.209.107 | 23-Oct-02/6:19 AM | Reply
I like this but, you've got a bridge AND a fireplace.... I got a little lost somewhere.
[8] Christof @ 195.172.133.226 > INTRANSIT | 23-Oct-02/6:24 AM | Reply
I'd settle for a bridge or a fireplace, but I couldn't fit them in my flat.
[8] INTRANSIT @ 204.110.225.254 > Christof | 27-Oct-02/6:30 AM | Reply
If you can fit Walt Whitman in your flat, you will have a bridge.
[8] INTRANSIT @ 204.110.225.254 > Christof | 27-Oct-02/6:30 AM | Reply
If you can fit Walt Whitman in your flat, you will have a bridge.
[8] INTRANSIT @ 204.110.225.254 | 27-Oct-02/6:28 AM | Reply
I like the rework, I can see the picture better now. Might've been me the first time. Anyway, this is beautiful and sad.good read.8
[8] Christof @ 195.172.133.226 | 28-Oct-02/7:59 AM | Reply
Why did you resubmit this? I can't see any changes... But anyway, I'll vote again.
[n/a] vulcan @ 80.242.3.38 > Christof | 28-Oct-02/8:03 AM | Reply
Thanks
[0] <{Baba^Yaga}> @ 24.126.113.154 | 29-Nov-02/2:13 AM | Reply
look out people a bridge..and a mystery...how unique.0.
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