INTRANSIT
on I sat beside the night by Niphredil
16 May 2005, 7:15 PM
I read them all. Have my rights as a human being been revoked? It sure feels like it.
glad to see your dad pop in and out from time to time.
look at the inversion dad pop. hmmmm.
This one my friend stumbles, and stuggles to fit the form. That, and also one is left wondering: "what is the meaning or signifigance of the desert plant agave?"
Be blessed by the angels of seven.
I'm reminded of my mother. And of my father.. and again of the circumstances of their polar coupling.
VileCandyMeLikesAndFears. Lick, nibble, withdraw, consume with passionate gluttony.
Thanks D. I am glad you like it.
Fuck fate, manifest your own destiny and steal the devils luck.
Thank you. The gipsy told me smoking will kill me - I'll light up, die reading.
It has been awhile since last I read your work or even checked the ranker, and it looks like your style has evolved/changed quite a bit.
What's he look like when he hands out a 10?...
Judging by the quality of the poem, I'd say the only defect is the title. Welcome. keep your head about you.
Some carry Louisville Sluggers. Others, X-ray machines.
I'm not going to vote on poetry, ever - but I like this one. It's a bit hypographic and you should buy O'Hara.
I expect nothing, though honestly I was starting to worry with all the high votes on other recent submissions.
You're kidding?
You're doing a great job with Poemranker, but if you expect a crowd-joining high vote for this, think again.
I looked for " lock-knee" Ankylosing was the closest I could find. I think this IS the ending the poem needs.
I like the genes/jeans thing, but why use such a medical term in the last line when stiff or grating would do? I think that is the question.
This looks like a response to someone who said, "Get a life." Maybe you should change the title to that.
This is quite good and a situation I can relate to. It's nice to be with someone who is "afraid of me intellectually," but nicer to banter with someone as an equal or where I'm slightly inferior.
Don't worry about rockmage. When he gives you a 5, he likes your work.
I want to think this is about an old woman. I guess I can if I want. And for that a 9.