Re: a comment on Father’s Day by Dovina	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	19-Jun-05/7:20 PM
Manilow already wrote the mother/daughter poem to end all mother/daughter poems; Sandra.
Re: Nonsense POEM #14687 by Bankrupt_Word_Clerk	Dovina 12.72.12.187	19-Jun-05/7:19 PM
As written, it's more story than poem.
Re: a comment on Father’s Day by Dovina	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	19-Jun-05/7:18 PM
Then jar it will... I have a lot of reasons not to become my father. I'm doing different all right, nevertheless I'm like him more and more each day. I hate it, and can't do anything about it. It's not just a father/son thing, for women it goes as well. But their aversion is less strong.
Re: Father’s Day by Dovina	Bankrupt_Word_Clerk 71.129.110.157	19-Jun-05/7:17 PM
I disagree with your premise. I am sorry you aren't aware of many old men that don't fit this stereotype. I'll try not to write about a woman's relationship with her mother to avoid the same trap.
Re: All in Love by gothiclovepoetiss	Dovina 12.72.12.187	19-Jun-05/7:16 PM
Not a limerick.
Re: White Stork by Blue Magpie	Dovina 12.72.12.187	19-Jun-05/7:11 PM
Storks are elegant birds, and lore's attached significance makes them seem more elegant; but your point gets lost in the form and even reduces them to "simple" bird.
Re: a comment on Naughty Poems (R) by untamed_fierce	lil_evil_boi 70.68.76.244	19-Jun-05/7:01 PM
It doesnt matter if your IP# is the same as someone elses, check out 24.69.255.205 or 195.157.153.249 or 213.146.148.199. I doubt all the users with those IP# are the same poeple. And by the way, coincidences happen you know. What if my message is posted with the same IP# as untamed_fierce, and within fifteen minutes of each other. That doesnt prove anything AT ALL. So shut up unless you have some sort of persuasive "speech" and "reliable" evidences. If not, I wouldnt be accusing someone of plagiarizing that fast.
Re: a comment on Father’s Day by Dovina	Dovina 12.72.12.187	19-Jun-05/7:01 PM
I want it to jar - not just that line, but all of it. The son does not have to become like his father. I believe the core of a man can improve.
Re: Father’s Day by Dovina	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	19-Jun-05/6:58 PM
Most men don't have to consider, they simply see what's happening with dad... On the other hand; the son is always convinced he will NOT become his father, he'll do better. So the idea that his own core also will be revealed in the end, escapes him. Interesting musings, but also disappointing, as a poem. Don't know why precisely. The 'complained/content' antithesis jars somewhat.
Re: Contemplation by raiyna	Dovina 12.72.12.187	19-Jun-05/6:57 PM
zodiac: I thought your new and more constructive criticism, which you introduced in the last month or so, would preclude giving a 10 with no comment,and especially giving a 10 when you probably don't mean it. I think a poet receiving a 10 or a 0 always deserves some comment. As for the poem, it expresses personal feelings in a not-very-poetic way. Needs to be shortened and the line spacing does noit help.
Re: grin and stand by celticskatermatt1	Dovina 12.72.12.187	19-Jun-05/6:50 PM
In addition to spelling, please reconsider "firey eyes." Otherwise a pretty good expression of teen awe.
Re: a comment on Eulogy for a Poet by Dovina	Dovina 12.72.12.187	19-Jun-05/6:41 PM
Not meant as a slam, really. These are mistakes I have made, and that I see many poets making. After we die, what matters?
Re: a comment on grin and stand by celticskatermatt1	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	19-Jun-05/5:52 PM
But what if he can activate spell check only by manual command and can't spell spell check right? I mean, what does he have to check to see if spell check was spelled correct?
Re: This or That by sacred_poet_me	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	19-Jun-05/5:47 PM
>>A boy would do anything for a girl.<< Sure. For a whole nine months.
Re: grin and stand by celticskatermatt1	Bankrupt_Word_Clerk 71.129.110.157	19-Jun-05/5:46 PM
spell check.
Re: Nonsense POEM #14687 by Bankrupt_Word_Clerk	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	19-Jun-05/5:41 PM
I should have left it at one stanz, it has a funny ending. Between 'Crackers' and 'Inarticulate' there are too many 'of's. Hey, but >>the cactus wants a hug<< is quite hilarious! Why don't you just throw out the bleak nonsense, and think up a few more funny lines alike? And do something about the penguins tuxedo; it's so 1880's.
Re: a comment on White Stork by Blue Magpie	Bankrupt_Word_Clerk 71.129.110.157	19-Jun-05/5:40 PM
just leave out the word subtler, or quieter, in line seven. it shortens the line a bit, but gives it a good rhythm.
Re: DEATH by celticskatermatt1	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	19-Jun-05/5:27 PM
Alright; you are dyslexic. Nothing to be ashamed of and it's definitely curable. But I'd like my enamel to last a little longer so I better steer clear from your poetry from now on...
Re: WAIT UNTIL THE END by celticskatermatt1	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	19-Jun-05/5:17 PM
This is pretty shitty. Just to rebalance a dangerously tilting PoemRanker site.
Re: WAIT UNTIL THE END by celticskatermatt1	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	19-Jun-05/5:17 PM
This is pretty shitty