Re: grin and stand by celticskatermatt1	Blue Magpie 212.205.251.82	19-Jun-05/10:48 PM
I would have to disagree with Dovina, this is a bland mediocre expression of teenage infatuation. The use of punctuation, and the correct form of the first person singular would also be a step in the right direction.
Re: Father’s Day by Dovina	Blue Magpie 212.205.251.82	19-Jun-05/10:44 PM
This is undoubtedly the worst thing of yours I have ever read. The content is a highly erroneous sweeping statement and the form is nothing really.
Re: Being Alone by Sunshine Conkey	Blue Magpie 212.205.251.82	19-Jun-05/10:41 PM
There is a certain lack of the truly poetic here, no real rhyme, rhythm or elegant use of language, if you take the line breaks out it is just a simple statement.
Re: a comment on White Stork by Blue Magpie	Blue Magpie 212.205.251.82	19-Jun-05/10:37 PM
The reference to 'simple bird' refers to the supposed speaker's image of storks, and all the rest of nature as being soulless automatons, a counterpoint to the reality that they had just seen and the was so many people see all non-human living things. However I could easily change it to noble, or watchful, or thoughtful, or............
Re: The tender side. by darby pyn	Dovina 12.72.5.226	19-Jun-05/9:15 PM
Doesn't make sense.
Re: The And women by INTRANSIT	Dovina 12.72.5.226	19-Jun-05/9:13 PM
Oh, but we are meant to be understood in our subtitles of language as we drag accross your eyes with pearls meant only to adorn.
Re: a comment on This or That by sacred_poet_me	Dovina 12.72.5.226	19-Jun-05/8:59 PM
No, he would for 100 years, but she always kicks him out.
Re: a comment on Diary of sorrow.... by dantron	Dovina 12.72.5.226	19-Jun-05/8:54 PM
Too generous on his, about right on yours.
Re: a comment on Father’s Day by Dovina	Dovina 12.72.5.226	19-Jun-05/8:51 PM
I doubt that, really. Head-in-sand is not your style. Or maybe you disagree with it.
Re: a comment on Father’s Day by Dovina	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	19-Jun-05/8:27 PM
I wished I hadn't read this.
Re: a comment on grin and stand by celticskatermatt1	Bankrupt_Word_Clerk 71.129.110.157	19-Jun-05/7:59 PM
you're right.. this guy could be screwed for the foreseeable future....and we will have to simply hope he will start to write his poetry in a Word Document with red underlines.
Re: a comment on Naughty Poems (R) by untamed_fierce	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	19-Jun-05/7:58 PM
'...that the material is public domain. All efforts are made to confirm they are not copyrighted material in any way. If you are the legal copyright owner of such material and we have mistakenly published the material on our Lots of Jokes network, please contact our headquarters for further information.' Very smart. The poem isn't signed and free for grabs. Happy with your 15-minutes fame, Untamed?
Re: Naughty Poems (R) by untamed_fierce	Bankrupt_Word_Clerk 71.129.110.157	19-Jun-05/7:41 PM
http://www.lotsofjokes.com/cat_312.htm They Are plagiarized. Here is a sight with all of the above located on the same page.
Re: a comment on Kiss Me by smiffy84	Dovina 12.72.12.187	19-Jun-05/7:41 PM
You're a funny man.
Re: a comment on Father’s Day by Dovina	Dovina 12.72.12.187	19-Jun-05/7:36 PM
I think "worrying about dying" is often at the core of the trap, and synicism is often its symptom.
Re: All in Love by gothiclovepoetiss	some deleted user 81.69.23.196	19-Jun-05/7:34 PM
>>all you need to remember is that all I need is you<< What about air? Food, water? Toiletpaper, clean bedclothes, dental care, money to pay the rent? If you are all HE needs he'll take care of that, of course. True love is a fallacy. And usually the gilding rubs away rather quick. But perhaps I'm a grouch. You know, the kind that spoils teenage parties. I know everyone has to start sometime and somewhere, but I so hate the mentality behind poems like this one. Your marital life is going to be a huge bore, sweetie. Like millions of others.
Re: Being Alone by Sunshine Conkey	Bankrupt_Word_Clerk 71.129.110.157	19-Jun-05/7:33 PM
I was trying to figure out the rhyme scheme. I see in the first two stanzas you rhyme lines 2 and 4. Then a five line 5th stanza with a rhyme in lines 3 and 4. was this the plan?
Re: a comment on Father’s Day by Dovina	Bankrupt_Word_Clerk 71.129.110.157	19-Jun-05/7:27 PM
Caught up in worrying about dying, and coping with change in all aspects of culture and technology, never helped anyone's disposition... but I agree that it is an avoidable trap.
Re: a comment on Father’s Day by Dovina	Dovina 12.72.12.187	19-Jun-05/7:24 PM
I think it's a tendency for men and women to get cynical and bitter as they age. I think it's an avoidable trap, and avoiding it leads to a happier old age.
Re: a comment on Father’s Day by Dovina	Dovina 12.72.12.187	19-Jun-05/7:22 PM
You are right in saying that many old men do not meet this stereotype. Many avoid the trap of becoming bitter and critical as they age.