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Being Alone (Free verse) by Sunshine Conkey
Being alone is a scary place, No one wants to be. You have no control over it, And God, it's happening to me. I sit here in the dark, And let the tears fall down, Waiting for the time, When someone special will come around. And so while I wait, My heart continues to break, For time goes by; And suddenly years fly. And still; I'm waiting.

Up the ladder: Mr. Moldmakerman
Down the ladder: it's tough at times

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Arithmetic Mean: 2.25
Weighted score: 4.672192
Overall Rank: 12202
Posted: June 19, 2005 7:26 PM PDT; Last modified: June 19, 2005 7:26 PM PDT
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[2] Bankrupt_Word_Clerk @ 71.129.110.157 | 19-Jun-05/7:33 PM | Reply
I was trying to figure out the rhyme scheme. I see in the first two stanzas you rhyme lines 2 and 4. Then a five line 5th stanza with a rhyme in lines 3 and 4.

was this the plan?
[n/a] Blue Magpie @ 212.205.251.82 | 19-Jun-05/10:41 PM | Reply
There is a certain lack of the truly poetic here, no real rhyme, rhythm or elegant use of language, if you take the line breaks out it is just a simple statement.
[4] Dovina @ 69.175.32.185 | 20-Jun-05/12:10 PM | Reply
It would be better without the first verse.
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