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grin and stand

Member since 2004 · Posted 19 Jun 2005 · 6 comments

walking by your side sweat is soaking on my brow my hands are sweaty my tungue is tied i cant speak at all i just grin and stand i stare into firey eyes and wisper how great you are

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[0] deleted user 19-Jun-05/5:09 PM Reply

Sigh. Why do I bother?
>>tungue<< ----tongue
>>firey<< -----fiery
>>wisper<< ----whisper
>>cant<< ------oh yes of course, the new, cool spelling we all race thru life theez days, from work 2 parkinglot 2 nightjob 2 parkinglot 2 pc 2 parkinglot 2 bar 2 mortician & graveyard, so we cant be bothrd by writng crect nmore.

>>sweat is soaking on my brow<<
You obviously never sweat. What is the sweat soaking? Your brow? Must be an awful sight, those flaps of soaked through, pulpy skin coming loose...she wont find u so great anymoor

Writers who write down without thinking are no writers.

[2] Bankrupt_Word_Clerk 19-Jun-05/5:46 PM Reply

spell check.

[0] deleted user › Bankrupt_Word_Clerk 19-Jun-05/5:52 PM Reply

But what if he can activate spell check only by manual command and can't spell spell check right? I mean, what does he have to check to see if spell check was spelled correct?

[2] Bankrupt_Word_Clerk › deleted user 19-Jun-05/7:59 PM Reply

you're right.. this guy could be screwed for the foreseeable future....and we will have to simply hope he will start to write his poetry in a Word Document with red underlines.

[4] Dovina 19-Jun-05/6:50 PM Reply

In addition to spelling, please reconsider "firey eyes." Otherwise a pretty good expression of teen awe.

[n/a] Blue Magpie 19-Jun-05/10:48 PM Reply

I would have to disagree with Dovina, this is a bland mediocre expression of teenage infatuation. The use of punctuation, and the correct form of the first person singular would also be a step in the right direction.