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grin and stand (Free verse) by celticskatermatt1

walking by your side sweat is soaking on my brow my hands are sweaty my tungue is tied i cant speak at all i just grin and stand i stare into firey eyes and wisper how great you are

Blue Magpie 19-Jun-05/10:48 PM
I would have to disagree with Dovina, this is a bland mediocre expression of teenage infatuation. The use of punctuation, and the correct form of the first person singular would also be a step in the right direction.




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