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This or That (Free verse) by sacred_poet_me A boy would do anything for a girl.
Seems so wonderful, like a dream come true,
As if he was her Knight in Shining Armour!
But in reality, is it the same?
Is it real?
Will he do the things he promised?
Or will he do nothing.
He promised:
He would stand up, and fight for her,
He would comfort her when she is down,
He would buy her the most precious jewel,
He would gladly take a bullet for her,
He would be with her no matter what,
He would listen to what she has to say,
He would do anything for her,
But the real question is:
Will he do house cleaning,
Wash the dishes,
Cook dinner,
Take care of the kids when time comes,
Will he do any of these?
For the rest of his life,
For her.
So I ask,
Will he do this?
Or
Will he do that?
Up the ladder:
don't know
Down the ladder:
on a more positive note
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 3.2
Posted: June 18, 2005 3:11 PM PDT; Last modified: June 18, 2005 3:11 PM PDTWeighted score: 4.7854347 Overall Rank: 11325 Comments:
Romantics Facing Reality -- meetings at 8PM at the International Order of Oddfellows Hall.
>>A boy would do anything for a girl.<<
Sure. For a whole nine months.
No, he would for 100 years, but she always kicks him out.
Dear Christ you're a little hapless, aren't you?
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'Will he go to the end of the world for her?
Will he also do household chores for her?'
No real problem to extend the message, but you could have used a bit more humor, more sarcasm.
The last 4 lines add nothing.