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This or That

by sacred_poet_me

Member since 2005 · Posted 18 Jun 2005 · 5 comments

A boy would do anything for a girl. Seems so wonderful, like a dream come true, As if he was her Knight in Shining Armour! But in reality, is it the same? Is it real? Will he do the things he promised? Or will he do nothing. He promised: He would stand up, and fight for her, He would comfort her when she is down, He would buy her the most precious jewel, He would gladly take a bullet for her, He would be with her no matter what, He would listen to what she has to say, He would do anything for her, But the real question is: Will he do house cleaning, Wash the dishes, Cook dinner, Take care of the kids when time comes, Will he do any of these? For the rest of his life, For her. So I ask, Will he do this? Or Will he do that?

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[4] deleted user 18-Jun-05/3:36 PM Reply
The core consists actually of two lines:
'Will he go to the end of the world for her?
Will he also do household chores for her?'
No real problem to extend the message, but you could have used a bit more humor, more sarcasm.
The last 4 lines add nothing.
[5] Bankrupt_Word_Clerk 18-Jun-05/4:56 PM Reply
Romantics Facing Reality -- meetings at 8PM at the International Order of Oddfellows Hall.
[4] deleted user 19-Jun-05/5:47 PM Reply
>>A boy would do anything for a girl.<<
Sure. For a whole nine months.
[3] Dovina › deleted user 19-Jun-05/8:59 PM Reply
No, he would for 100 years, but she always kicks him out.
[n/a] zodiac › Dovina 20-Jun-05/5:56 AM Reply
Dear Christ you're a little hapless, aren't you?