Re: I hate you too U2 by D. $ Fontera	zodiac 212.38.134.51	14-Aug-05/1:17 AM
Hey, no one's done that wordplay before!
Re: The Stinging by Mona Lisa	zodiac 212.38.134.51	14-Aug-05/1:16 AM
Do you really think that what wasps are doing in their hives is, um, stinging things? Other than that, nice.
Re: Words by Dovina	zodiac 212.38.134.51	14-Aug-05/1:13 AM
Is he the inventor of Shift+F7?
Re: First by Dovina	zodiac 212.38.134.51	14-Aug-05/1:04 AM
Verily. -0-
Re: a comment on Never born. by | Broken |	zodiac 212.38.134.51	14-Aug-05/12:40 AM
"The itchiest itch is only a shadow of some greater almighty itch" is the most illogical thing I've ever said, and I feel it to the core of my being. How ya like dem apples? You're not answering my point. CS Lewis' proof of God is the transience of earthly pleasure and his feeling that there's got to be some better pleasure out there. If you felt that earthly misery was pretty tepid overall, and you just KNEW there was some greater, higher misery out there, what would that be proof of? Um, God. My examples are exactly the same as CS, except mine make God sound kind of like a jackass, in my opinion. And this is all bum thinking (or feeling?) to begin with. For all the reasons above. To wit, there's no reason to believe a word like, say, satisfaction means 'some perfect state of well-being pretty much unattainable in earthly existence'. Your problem, if I may say so Dovina, is that you keep forgetting words are just things we made up once.
Re: a comment on More Than The World by XOXScottishgrlXOX	zodiac 212.38.134.51	14-Aug-05/12:31 AM
Consider who is using it in common language. Recent immigrants, my friend, recent immigrants. Is that really the face you want to show the world? "We all got our problems" is grammatically correct, if not exactly right for the present situation. Most half-educated people I know also habitually say "Everyone has his own problems" or "We all have problems". Which are easier and just as clear, if anything. I agree with your point that "Everyone has their own problems" would be a perfectly fine thing to include in a poem written, say, in the voice of a hillbilly.
Re: a comment on More Than The World by XOXScottishgrlXOX	zodiac 212.38.134.51	14-Aug-05/12:27 AM
Describe "almost omnipotent".
Re: Shadow by TLRufener	Dovina 69.175.32.104	12-Aug-05/7:27 PM
I like it except for the use of "them" and "they" in referring to a person. The ending is great.
Re: sculpture by ThePariahDog	Dovina 69.175.32.104	12-Aug-05/7:25 PM
The first 4 lines are good, given the tight restraint you've chosen. The last 4 lines drift from the theme.
Re: Forever by my side by RGSsparky	Dovina 69.175.32.104	12-Aug-05/7:23 PM
Good thoughts, but need better poetic expression.
Re: The cat who would fly by nentwined	Dovina 69.175.32.104	12-Aug-05/7:15 PM
Do you mean "off my face"? "a past that's not yet happened" the cycle, the simple thing. It does seem that simple sometimes.
Re: The cat who would fly by nentwined	Shuushin 147.154.235.52	12-Aug-05/1:01 PM
I very much like the ending - I think maybe too many small words pull the punch a bit.
Re: The cat who would fly by nentwined	Mona Lisa 172.214.52.232	12-Aug-05/9:01 AM
Line 6 just affects the whole thing. Otherwise its a peach.
Re: a comment on I Never Thought by TLRufener	ALChemy 65.188.89.69	12-Aug-05/6:48 AM
Better.
Re: sculpture by ThePariahDog	ALChemy 65.188.89.69	12-Aug-05/6:44 AM
This is a concrete poem. Pretty neat on too.
Re: a comment on Waiting Room by jessicazee	jessicazee 64.12.117.5	11-Aug-05/6:51 PM
What a nice thing to say. Thanks so much! I needed that today, and I may even be motivated to finally get all my shit together & make a little book. Thank you!
Re: The cat who would fly by nentwined	<~> 167.206.181.179	11-Aug-05/1:54 PM
placid may not be the right word, k. it diminishes the impact of the rest of the otherwise strong poem.
Re: a comment on Come back to me Nancy (or if not, then Faye) by T. Jonathron Remp	T. Jonathron Remp 128.252.229.185	10-Aug-05/11:23 AM
Well thank you. It came to me in a blinding flash. Actually, it was more like a series of blurry bursts. Well, come to think of it, it was in fact closer to a long, dim hum of myopia.
Re: Stream of Consciousness (#1) by Enkidu	Bethy 24.222.32.221	10-Aug-05/10:21 AM
Keep going...keep going...this is really great...Bethy:)
Re: Come back to me Nancy (or if not, then Faye) by T. Jonathron Remp	Bethy 24.222.32.221	10-Aug-05/10:15 AM
Jon this is magnificent...its a fav for me...Bethy:)