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The Stinging

Member since 2003 · Posted 12 Aug 2005 · Edited 16 Aug 2005 · 1 comment

I oiled in the slick of her. Tracing my hands where lips fell like jailed Casanova. I am naked as my journal quill eyed and silent, Incapable of joy. My body's a masterpiece of scratches and whispers that scream to be heard again. She sleeps in a steel wasp by a window seat next to honeyed skies, and I am left stinging In a silent satin hive. A wedding veil of sky will one day fall like we did, and we will dull stars, as we shine amongst lost worlds.

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[10] zodiac 14-Aug-05/1:16 AM Reply
Do you really think that what wasps are doing in their hives is, um, stinging things? Other than that, nice.