Re: Powerless Dreamer by Beyond_Dreams	Dovina 12.96.171.27	4-Sep-05/11:33 AM
Smooth "no sunlight had"
Re: Lessons(revised) by bellafuego	Dovina 12.96.171.27	4-Sep-05/11:18 AM
2+2=4 no matter how many times you revise it. The last line, and all but the second, make sense.
Re: The secret press by zodiac	bellafuego 199.77.249.2	4-Sep-05/9:44 AM
thanks for the comment on "Lessons" after reading some of your poems the meaning i was trying to convey wasn't coming across. your work is pretty skilled, very easy to visualize the words.
Re: Stranger by MacFrantic	ay deee 24.255.87.123	3-Sep-05/10:33 PM
when does he find time to get new fish? i gave an eight just because that last part didn't flow to me
Re: orange crumble by impert&ent	ay deee 24.255.87.123	3-Sep-05/10:03 PM
i can imagine this wall, i think i pass it often
Re: Into My World by sliver	ay deee 24.255.87.123	3-Sep-05/8:45 PM
if i were reneee, i would take you to bed right now, but since i am not, i just want to know what exactly it is about renee you like so much, why is she so beautiful? i like the form a bit 5
Re: The fight by INTRANSIT	Bethy 24.222.32.196	3-Sep-05/3:53 PM
giggle-gasp-splat!!! I love this line...this poem made me roar with...gasp! laughter...:) Bethy
Re: Cinder Mint Disaster Garden by MacFrantic	Bethy 24.222.32.225	3-Sep-05/12:01 PM
Hey, me too...a garden of lonely desperate souls...:) Bethy
Re: a comment on Dale by INTRANSIT	INTRANSIT 152.163.100.138	3-Sep-05/10:01 AM
I raise my paw and say: BAH!
Re: Dale by INTRANSIT	Dovina 12.96.171.2	3-Sep-05/9:55 AM
What's left? Black russians, that's what. Far super over White, in every way. I've never taught a man to play darts and then have him beat his father. Maybe you need another lesson.
Re: a comment on The Scout by wilco	Dovina 12.96.171.2	3-Sep-05/9:40 AM
I'm sitting at a bar where there's an internet computer sunk into the bar, with a wireless keyboard and mouse. The black russian is sweet under a hot Texasn sun. Subjected to such adversity, do you really expect me to see some cajun hurricane or the end of mankind. No, of course you don't. Mankind sit all around, all girlfriended or wived. And all you can complain about is a few thousand miserble flooded, crushed lives.
Re: a comment on The Scout by wilco	wilco 66.61.101.130	3-Sep-05/8:30 AM
You are right about that....I'll have to think on it.
Re: a comment on The Scout by wilco	wilco 66.61.101.130	3-Sep-05/8:26 AM
I don't really like to explain my writing too much but this is about New Orleans. Everything here has a particular meaning as to what I wanted to get across. Maybe it's not getting across....
Re: Cinder Mint Disaster Garden by MacFrantic	INTRANSIT 64.12.116.67	3-Sep-05/8:16 AM
I saw mental patients in a garden. I'm not kidding.
Re: a comment on The fight by INTRANSIT	Dovina 12.96.171.27	3-Sep-05/7:02 AM
If it's a naughtiness scale, you get 10.
Re: The Scout by wilco	Dovina 12.96.171.27	3-Sep-05/7:00 AM
"virgin canvas" has no picture, yet a tale unfolds. Also, "scout" as if searching ahead for some group of people - maybe another word. A way it could have gone, and might go.
Re: a comment on The fight by INTRANSIT	INTRANSIT 152.163.100.138	3-Sep-05/6:56 AM
not naughty enough judging by the scores. ha!
Re: The fight by INTRANSIT	Dovina 12.96.171.27	3-Sep-05/6:55 AM
Very naughty! Go straight to your room!
Re: a comment on First Love by Dovina	INTRANSIT 152.163.100.138	3-Sep-05/6:55 AM
maybe that's what they mean by -too gay.
Re: The Scout by wilco	INTRANSIT 152.163.100.67	3-Sep-05/6:54 AM
-extraneous- good word but it bugs me beat-wise. Something about l-3 and l-4 in the first don't jive.