Re: a comment on lunch by ay deee	ay deee 24.255.87.123	5-Sep-05/7:17 AM
thank you, i've been thinking about work a lot lately.
Re: Baudelaire: The Albatross by Sasha	zodiac 213.186.186.1	5-Sep-05/5:54 AM
The first line-and-a-half is the best opening I've read recently.
Re: My Dad's Armchair. by Bethy	7!3 219.95.8.62	5-Sep-05/5:39 AM
lovely...
Re: First Love by Dovina	Bethy 24.222.32.194	5-Sep-05/5:34 AM
I am surely not "winter-broken" either...lol...here in Canada, we have winter and winnnnnter...lol...:) Bethy
Re: The Scout by wilco	Bethy 24.222.32.194	5-Sep-05/5:27 AM
The title doesn't appeal to me, I do like how you used wolves with regards to the hurricane...:) Bethy
Re: Dale by INTRANSIT	Bethy 24.222.32.194	5-Sep-05/5:14 AM
good memories...we all have them, this is what I write about, fic and non-fic...still there all good feelings...someone always laughs, it either reminds people of themselves or someone...this one reminds me of my buddy Ed...and he was a nutbar... still is...thanks for the belly giggles...lol :) Bethy
Re: lunch by ay deee	Bethy 24.222.32.194	5-Sep-05/5:03 AM
I like this, it is just the kind of stuff you hear at lunch...cool :) Bethy
Re: 9/5 by cronus	Bethy 24.222.32.194	5-Sep-05/4:46 AM
a diary, what a fantastic way to feel poetry...:) Bethy
Re: The Absense of God by Bluemonkey	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 81.159.221.190	5-Sep-05/4:26 AM
Yeah well there are hardly any Christians where I live, and we haven't been pulped by any McHurricaines. It's like all those Muslim fundamentalists who believe the Tsunami was a message from God telling the Indonesians not to adopt Western customs, but to remain fully scarfed-up. Of course the message would have been rather more potent had the Tsunami struck the shores of California, where Nudity runs wide-rife, and where a Gentleman cannot walk Five Paces without brushing up against a Gay.
Re: a comment on First Love by Dovina	zodiac 86.108.9.1	5-Sep-05/3:34 AM
Yes. Dovina wakes up on a winter morning and sees the sunrise and thinks it will stay. The other 5,999,999,999 people on earth wake up and say, Oh, a sunrise, too bad it won't stay. But then, they're not poets. Do you see my point? PS-Yes, I know it's a metaphor. Ibid.
Re: a comment on How Angels Sleep by Dovina	zodiac 86.108.9.1	5-Sep-05/3:27 AM
I suggest changing to title of the poem to either "How Not-Real Angels Sleep" or "Not How Real Angels Sleep, But How Things that Are Kind Of Like Angels (Or Would Be Like Angels If They Didn't Sleep Differently From Angels) Sleep" to avoid confusing us literal-minded.
Re: Strength by Dovina	zodiac 86.108.9.1	5-Sep-05/3:24 AM
The amount you should think he disapproves is, "pretty much, but not to an extent or in a way that necessitates raging." Is it?
Re: Drinking Knowledge by gregsamsa222	ay deee 24.255.87.123	4-Sep-05/9:19 PM
sculptuing and drawing go very well with tea, but i would agree with the ethics bit
Re: a comment on First Love by Dovina	LilMsLadyPoet 152.163.100.138	4-Sep-05/7:41 PM
I thought that it would stay.> I think this is the rhythm I would have chosen, and I would have thought that it added more 'connotation' to the whole thing. In fact at first read, I slipped it in there, then reread, and realized that it was not there. May I add to the discussion about rhythm...to me it is ALL about the rhythm...if the rhythm is off it just doesn't feel right to me. A piece can be astoundingly deep and say mountains of worthwhile things, but if the rhtythm is off I will never be happy with it. Personally, I worry more about rhythm than even puncuation. (I know, it shows!!) Decent piece, though.
Re: Strength by Dovina	Bethy 24.222.32.218	4-Sep-05/6:15 PM
get outta my head...lol...*10* :) Bethy
Re: Untitled by bellafuego	Dovina 12.96.171.27	4-Sep-05/2:44 PM
Try again when you're sober.
Re: a comment on Beware of Cruel Poets by Dovina	Dovina 12.96.171.27	4-Sep-05/2:43 PM
Do you know that, being a new user, or are you speculating?
Re: Secret Dream-Thoughts of a Married Man by Bethy	bellafuego 199.77.249.2	4-Sep-05/12:45 PM
wow!!! this poem could have been a scene in one of those lifetime tv movies about cheating husbands
Re: Beware of Cruel Poets by Dovina	bellafuego 199.77.249.2	4-Sep-05/12:35 PM
perfect poem for this site
Re: Lessons(revised) by bellafuego	ay deee 24.255.87.123	4-Sep-05/12:26 PM
word to that