Re: For my unborn by Caducus	Dovina 24.172.198.142	6-Oct-05/4:37 PM
I give birth almost every morning during the half-sleep after dream and before reason. Maybe this is not what you mean, doesn't matter.
Re: My First Boyfriend by jessicazee	Dovina 24.172.198.142	6-Oct-05/4:30 PM
From "your waterbed sucked me in" on it's good.
Re: Enigmatic Innocence by Katzclear	Dovina 24.172.198.142	6-Oct-05/4:28 PM
stoicism is so similar to apathy that the opening lines seem trivial. Vile existance and survival are not similar, making the next few lines wonderment. "Steadfast mistaken for diffidence" is a good line. The last line seems to change the subject.
Re: a comment on The Servant and The Messenger by ALChemy	Dovina 65.248.172.5	5-Oct-05/4:33 PM
It all depends on faith. We can take the word of anyone, and if that word is taken without apprehension from inputs received through our five senses and from logic, then it's an act of faith.
Re: a comment on Why I’m Homeless by Dovina	Dovina 65.248.172.5	5-Oct-05/3:51 PM
Yeah, I think dashes would be better.
Re: a comment on nicholson by ay deee	ay deee 204.90.50.252	5-Oct-05/3:37 PM
right arm.
Re: a comment on pep talk by ay deee	ay deee 204.90.50.252	5-Oct-05/3:37 PM
if you lost it, where would you find it, and what would you do to fill the void created by it's absence?
Re: a comment on pep talk by ay deee	ay deee 204.90.50.252	5-Oct-05/3:36 PM
thank you kindly.
Re: a comment on pep talk by ay deee	ay deee 204.90.50.252	5-Oct-05/3:36 PM
what's so good about up to and including hairy shirt? what's so bad about the rest?
Re: a comment on sap's pay by ay deee	ay deee 204.90.50.252	5-Oct-05/3:35 PM
well... you're not so thick, you almost get it. so i'm not doing a shit job, but i am writing from the perspecitve of one who does a shit job and it's not so much the amount of money in the poem, but what is being done with it that is important. maybe you should deepen your definition of deeper.
Re: a comment on sap's pay by ay deee	ay deee 204.90.50.252	5-Oct-05/3:34 PM
both. why do you ask?
Re: I don't rhyme enough, eh? by Niphredil	daggatolar 195.166.242.114	5-Oct-05/1:27 PM
rhyme ; the criminal act of forcing words into feelings, when poetry in the first instance is a feeling feel for meaning that does not come wordless... I cannot agree less.
Re: Lost (not a poem) by Caducus	daggatolar 195.166.242.114	5-Oct-05/1:19 PM
true to the heart can love so out this world be worthy of a world eating up hearts before you can even earn a meal to live to see tomorrow?
Re: a comment on The Servant and The Messenger by ALChemy	ALChemy 24.74.96.183	5-Oct-05/9:52 AM
Forgive my spelling I'm quite sleepy.
Re: a comment on The Servant and The Messenger by ALChemy	ALChemy 24.74.96.183	5-Oct-05/9:48 AM
The bible quotes were a silly game I was playing with an even sillier man. The summa in my mind is philosophy not religion. The bible is hearsay. God spoke to men who then spoke to people etc. until someone finally wrote it down. A record of God and his teachings. Is Socrates talking to you when he teaches Plato? Of course not. I'm sure their both happy their teachings are being retaught by mankind but it's still not same thing. If you read the bible and the actual spirit of God does not come to you and speak to your heart in a language unspoken, unheard, and that only your heart can decipher than you are simply reading a book about God and his teachings. A book that's been manipulated by greedy men so much that I'm supprised it still packs a punch. "What is wrong with God using things or people to speak to us. . .to our hearts even?" What's wrong with it is what the poems about. I mean how do you know if God ain't there to say "Yep I sent him" or "Yep I said exactly what he wrote in that book."? Well formulated question by the way, tadpole.
Re: a comment on Escape by Heather Dee	ALChemy 24.74.96.183	5-Oct-05/8:50 AM
New one: "take a moment to flex your sphincter now stick your finger in it's cincture"
Re: a comment on Escape by Heather Dee	ALChemy 24.74.96.183	5-Oct-05/8:39 AM
"take a moment to flex your sphincter Play a song of great destincture" Best I could do. I think cliches still have use in small amounts like in irony but otherwise I agree with you more than ever on this.
Re: A Light in the Dark by Verse2Verse	zodiac 212.118.19.67	5-Oct-05/3:28 AM
http://www.slate.com/id/2120101/
Re: Pebbles by Verse2Verse	zodiac 212.118.19.67	5-Oct-05/2:10 AM
"With every pebble thrown A heart suffers loss" is the part that sounds most like an Poison-esque power ballad or country music. And really? Does that heart REALLY "suffer loss" every time you throw a pebble? Excuse me for suggesting that sounds like one of those things which are only true in power ballads, like love's like a knife, or the jukebox playing your song.
Re: The chestnut by richa	zodiac 212.118.19.67	5-Oct-05/2:01 AM
Really great. Is that really how it's spelled? I thought absinthe, and am too lazy to check.