Re: a comment on Beneath the Willow Tree by cyan9	cyan9 217.40.63.105	21-Nov-05/1:34 AM
I cant find your comment about peoples like for their own poetry.... but it was quite true. My comment about the Wow! business on allpoetry.com was meant to depict that the feedback was generally useless, rather than everyone really likes it (in case that was the picture you got)
Re: a comment on Beneath the Willow Tree by cyan9	zodiac 217.144.7.195	21-Nov-05/1:29 AM
I'm actually afraid to talk about something real here. We barely find enough time to talk about nothing. If I were going to talk about something here, I think it'd be this, from The Book of Questions, Volume 1: Would you agree to be totally paralysed from the neck down for a year if it would save the endangered blue whale from extinction, given that its extinction is absolutely certain otherwise? Assume that your recovery would be complete and instantaneous.
Re: a comment on The Fall of Marvin Hyde by cyan9	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	21-Nov-05/12:14 AM
<Footnote:- Don't worry about who likes it or doesn't, post it. You need to get feedback (good or bad) on any of your work that you think has potential. Personally I'm really interested to see where you're going to take this.
Re: The Fall of Marvin Hyde by cyan9	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	21-Nov-05/12:08 AM
This may be assuming too much and it's certainly none of my business but have you kicked the habit? I'm guessing yes. There's just as good a chance this is completely fictional and based on nothing in your life but heroin's a fucked up drug don't you think?
Re: a comment on Amber's Witness by cyan9	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	20-Nov-05/11:18 PM
Looking forward to it.
Re: Amber's Witness by cyan9	eliastemplar 204.117.159.226	20-Nov-05/7:33 PM
I think it might be more provokative, and better flowing to change "autumn's oncoming" to "autumn's coming".
Re: The Rose by sk8rs_rule_all	eliastemplar 204.117.159.226	20-Nov-05/7:30 PM
Try "The smell rises out of each petal." The repetition of "each" is an obstacle for the reader.
Re: A daisy chain for Nina by Caducus	eliastemplar 204.117.159.226	20-Nov-05/6:34 PM
You reminded me that a daisy chain isn't just a type of explosive device.
Re: soon i will travel by ay deee	eliastemplar 204.117.159.226	20-Nov-05/6:31 PM
Remember that haiku idealy appeal to multiple senses. Smell, touch, taste, sight, sound.
Re: The Fall of Marvin Hyde by cyan9	Dovina 209.247.222.98	20-Nov-05/4:58 PM
Maybe the ficticious Herbert Cyan is more real than Marvyn Hyde. The parallel poem is not up so I can't say, only that what I used to see as the ficticious Dovina is becoming more real every day. She'll pop into life some day and stab a knife into _____.
Re: Fuck the stars by Patrice727	sk8rs_rule_all 24.160.154.168	20-Nov-05/4:41 PM
lovely.
Re: a comment on Random Sandwich, or, The Scavenger's Chocolate Wrapper by impert&ent	Dovina 209.247.222.98	20-Nov-05/4:32 PM
You didn't use mine. I should give a zero.
Re: Moving Forward In Reverse (For Ann) by wilco	sk8rs_rule_all 24.160.154.168	20-Nov-05/4:25 PM
I absoutely love the way you write.
Re: a comment on Amber's Witness by cyan9	cyan9 84.12.150.59	20-Nov-05/2:40 PM
All of the pieces that I have on this site were written in the last month or so, with the exception of Nail Biter and Haven that were written closer to the beginning of the year. I develop my styles as I go, and have been going for about 10 years and pretty much develop a different style each season. This style suits me well for public use, it is strong in imagery and lets the reader experience your journey without knowing where they have gone, and so is easier for me use on open mike.... I have a lot of different styles that I have utilised, and quite often left behind me. It will Wednesday before I can put anything else up; but I'll put up a couple from this series of pieces that describe an imaginary 'fiend' called Dr Herbert Cyan, its a bit darker and a lot more twisted than the usual; but it tells the story well.
Re: a comment on leah by T. Jonathron Remp	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	20-Nov-05/1:14 PM
She only got two minutes out of you?! How familiar that must be for her.
Re: a comment on leah by T. Jonathron Remp	T. Jonathron Remp 70.242.145.139	20-Nov-05/11:00 AM
lol you're right. that's what i get for writing it in 2 minutes with no edit
Re: Random Sandwich, or, The Scavenger's Chocolate Wrapper by impert&ent	impert&ent 82.46.140.179	20-Nov-05/9:17 AM
A collage of snippets from the first lines of the last 13 poems to appear on Poemranker's RSS feed. Neither random nor contrived, this pick of the litter/litter-picker's approach to composition reflects the momentary ambience of poemranker.
Re: Prejudice and Racism by TLRufener	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	20-Nov-05/7:20 AM
If there was a black kid on the island maybe Piggy would have stood a chance.
Re: Send The Devil... by horus8	cpill 81.179.105.60	20-Nov-05/6:59 AM
My my you grow like a coral reef And I will always want to cut me feet
Re: Amber's Witness by cyan9	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	20-Nov-05/6:38 AM
Reminds me of back home in PA. This is good solid descriptive poetry. I like the juxtaposition of the metalic terms with the forest setting. I wish there were a few more of them to maintain that contrast and add even more depth. I see some tendencies in your work to focus on evoking the emotion through elaborate description, which is great, don't get me wrong but I'm left wondering what other styles you might have in your arsonal. Poems can also make us think and/or rethink ideas of something and poems can also tell you a good story. I mean if this is your thing and you'd rather focus on it, well that's fine. I just think your capabilities are much wider than this. I also am guessing alot of these poems were written timewise in close proximity to one another because many of the descriptions and metaphors you use recur in your other poems. That happens to me whenever I write alot of poems in a short timespan.