Re: almost missed work by calliope	zodiac 212.38.134.51	7-Dec-05/1:26 AM
Yeah. Sweet, no lingering impression.
Re: a comment on YOUR OWN PLEASURE by Zoe	zodiac 212.38.134.51	7-Dec-05/1:10 AM
PS-The breadth of your reading is amazing. What fiction are you reading now?
Re: a comment on YOUR OWN PLEASURE by Zoe	zodiac 212.38.134.51	7-Dec-05/1:08 AM
Yeah, I was looking at your pictures. Living in the Middle East (a ghostly sort of Latino beauty, if any,) always makes me want to move back to Mexico and do obvious things, like getting a flat in Coyoacan and eating tacos al pastor with a Bohemia.
Re: a comment on Snake in the Grass by thepinkbunnyofdoom	zodiac 212.38.134.51	7-Dec-05/12:50 AM
Ooh, righteous indignation! Why are you ripping off 80s lyrics then? Go fuck yourself. Everything you write is awful because where anybody else would have taken some of his readers' advice and stopped writing the same crap with the same mistakes all the fucking time, you seem to have preferred sticking your head in a clothes dryer and hitting 'Go'.
Re: a comment on The Incubation by oneglove	zodiac 212.38.134.51	7-Dec-05/12:46 AM
The second, I believe. The real point is that people who whine about things whine about American culture becoming a hodgepodge of unoriginal sound bites, used poorly. I don't whine myself, but I think they have good some good points occasionally.
Re: a comment on Irish Holliday by Dovina	zodiac 212.38.134.51	7-Dec-05/12:43 AM
They are happy, but whatever.
Re: a comment on Jesus, you I see by amanda_dcosta	zodiac 212.38.134.51	7-Dec-05/12:42 AM
Just what I read in college. It's where St Francis Xavier is buried, right? How did you end up there?
Re: a comment on FIVE LOAVES AND TWO FISH by amanda_dcosta	zodiac 212.38.134.51	7-Dec-05/12:38 AM
Religiously and metaphorically, yes. But, from a literary standpoint, a metaphor needs to work in the literal sense before you can worry about making it work in the metaphorical sense. Consider comparisons like "He was intolerably stupid, Alex Trebek with a better moustache", or "his hands so tenderly caressing the piano keys were miniature David Beckhams sprinting across the cricket pitch". Sure, the guy's stupid, and sure someone playing well is like David Beckham, but the metaphors fall apart, because Alex Trebek isn't stupid and has a great moustache, or because David Beckham is a good soccer player, not a good cricketer. I'm not disputing your actual meaning, which is a good one. But if you have to get a Christian message across by changing the literal events in the Bible -well, that can't happen, can it? Cheers -zodiac
Re: YOUR OWN PLEASURE by Zoe	Dovina 69.175.32.104	6-Dec-05/7:31 PM
It’s not strictly paradelle, which has only four stanzas compared to your eight. Nor does your last stanza contain all of the words in the above stanzas. Nor is it two paradelles, because the fourth stanza does not contain all the words in the above four. Still, it’s a good poem and holds the thoughts together in spite of a very constraining form. It is certainly better than http://poemranker.com/poem-details.jsp?id=107380 where I mock Billy Collins, the French, and other sticklers to form.
Re: The Dark by cyan9	some deleted user 204.97.18.35	6-Dec-05/5:44 PM
The more I read this, the more I like it. Nice work.
Re: YOUR OWN PLEASURE by Zoe	some deleted user 204.97.18.35	6-Dec-05/5:14 PM
i really like this, especially the first four stanzas.
Re: a comment on Snake in the Grass by thepinkbunnyofdoom	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	6-Dec-05/4:29 PM
Actually I meant it as a rhetorical question. See this is a famous question/urban legion that a supposed prominent psychologist devised to separate those potential psychopaths from the normal folk. The psychopathic answer: She killed her sister in the hope that he'd show up at yet another family funeral. So congrats, you're not a psycho. Maybe a little schizoid with the multiple answers and all but most of us here are a little wacky like that.
Re: The Dark by cyan9	Dovina 69.175.32.104	6-Dec-05/2:01 PM
Very dark indeed. Fear = sanity? Terror = delivery? The semicolon and colon seem unnecessary.
Re: a comment on Snake in the Grass by thepinkbunnyofdoom	thepinkbunnyofdoom 66.213.67.10	6-Dec-05/1:40 PM
The smart ass answer 1. Mental instability, perhaps a long standing grude, and opportunity. The Stab in the Dark Answer 2. The man was her sister A further Stab in the Dark Answer 3. The man was her sister and she fucked him before being told his true identity A far fetched idea 4. It's really complicated and involves being ones own grandmother type shit. I'm sure you don't want to even hear that one. And my honest answer 5. I have no fucking clue
Re: a comment on Snake in the Grass by thepinkbunnyofdoom	thepinkbunnyofdoom 66.213.67.10	6-Dec-05/1:33 PM
Please, if I was writing to the tune of a song it'd be far more likely to an artist whose only emerged within the last 10 years. Everything I write is awful. I could steal the writer's digest annual poetry competition's 1st place entry and you'd still think it was awful. I have 2 words for you, drop dead. It'd be far better than coming back here, where like it or not, your part of a warmachine controlled by a man whose snorted more coke at one time than most people will ever see in a lifetime.
Re: a comment on Irish Holliday by Dovina	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	6-Dec-05/1:09 PM
"I would that he would fit in the laundry." Yeah that sure cleared it up for me.
Re: laugh again by skaskowski	Dovina 69.175.32.104	6-Dec-05/1:04 PM
How can the rim of a coin be a mobius strip? What metaphor?
Re: a comment on Irish Holliday by Dovina	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	6-Dec-05/1:02 PM
Only if I'm implying Fred is Jesus and Wilma's Mary.
Re: The Incubation by oneglove	Dovina 69.175.32.104	6-Dec-05/1:00 PM
Wordy in places, but good. The long lines could be shortened or cut.
Re: a comment on Shoebox Thoughts by BrandonW	ALChemy 24.74.101.159	6-Dec-05/12:59 PM
Yeah right, the E is silent.