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YOUR OWN PLEASURE (Other) by Zoe
A pleasure whose origin is to be placed outside us and in objects whose
presence we cannot be sure of; a pleasure therefore that is precarious
in itself, undermined by the fear of loss.
âMichel Foucault
I search for you in the city
I search for you in the city,
scan each face I pass, note each tree
scan each face I pass, note each tree.
I scan for you in the pass, note each city;
I search each face in the tree.
The bright shop window youâll see,
the bright shop window youâll see
with her: itâs strange that youâre so close
with her: itâs strange that youâre so close
The bright, her window; strange that youâll close
with its shop: see that youâre so.
When it grows dark: the streets
when it grows dark; the streets
are a mass of bodies, lights and cars
are a mass of bodies lights and cars.
When the bodies a-mass, dark cars
are it: the streets of grows and lights.
You exist somewhere without;
you exist somewhere without
me in the heaving mess:
me in the heaving mess.
Me somewhere. Exist heaving.
You in the mess without.
I stop to buy a newspaper;
I stop to buy a newspaper.
Long columns of words remind me;
long columns of words remind me.
Me? I long to column a newspaper,
stop to remind: buy of words.
Long, striped fields outside Vienna,
long striped fields outside Vienna;
seen when I flew home early,
seen when I flew home early.
Long seen fields when Vienna flew;
I striped home (outside early).
You were to follow, but thenâ
you were to follow, but then
like now, something snapped inside me:
like now, something snapped inside me.
You follow now to inside, like me,
but then you were something snapped.
I foresee you alone:
I foresaw you. Strange that youâll close
seeing field, word, light;
heaving field, word, light.
Long seen words snap alone:
I am the fields that you light.
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Posted: December 5, 2005 8:04 AM PST; Last modified: December 5, 2005 8:04 AM PST
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Also, the title in all caps is a bit annoying...something of a no, no 'round here.
'Billy Collins claimed that the paradelle was invented in eleventh century France, but he actually invented it himself to parody strict forms, particularly the villanelle. His sample paradelle, "Paradelle for Susan" (c1997), was intentionally terrible, completing the final stanza with the line "Darken the mountain, time and find was my into it was with to to".
When Collins first published the paradelle, it was with the footnote "The paradelle is one of the more demanding French fixed forms, first appearing in the langue d'oc love poetry of the eleventh century. It is a poem of four six-line stanzas in which the first and second lines, as well as the third and fourth lines of the first three stanzas, must be identical. The fifth and sixth lines, which traditionally resolve these stanzas, must use all the words from the preceding lines and only those words. Similarly, the final stanza must use every word from all the preceding stanzas and only these words."'
Does it bother you that the form you're taking seriously was invented as a mockery of serious form? I mean, I don't see why it would, I'm just curious. I think you're a better writer than Billy Collins, by the way.
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Too late Watson are we
Too late Watson we are
we too late are Watson
Are late too Watson we
etc. etc.
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