Re: 9 Things to Eat for Breakfast & Why by A. Nomaly	nentwined 75.83.196.201	5-Mar-09/9:44 PM
I read that as "51 lbs" black licorice and thought you really needed to lay off the meth. The rest... hmm. Doesn't really do anything for me.
Re: Gladly For Love by sliver	nentwined 75.83.196.201	5-Mar-09/9:43 PM
forget about me. make your own tomorrow ;) the desire you feel is probably better in your head than on paper (or consummated in other ways).
Re: a comment on Disillusioned & Confused by Sigh'ense...	nentwined 75.83.196.201	5-Mar-09/9:41 PM
disregard "angsty", I guess--just noticed it's a pimple. You hit the mood spot on, there. ;)
Re: Disillusioned & Confused by Sigh'ense...	nentwined 75.83.196.201	5-Mar-09/9:40 PM
angsty and doesn't scan well. nit: "to many just" -> "too many just" (I think?) I really like "the fetus of innocence is devoured by hypocritical jackals". I could do with that metaphor being developed further throughout. As it is, things feel scattershot. I'm not too into collage, visually or poetically.
Re: Fewer And Further In Between by Sigh'ense...	nentwined 75.83.196.201	5-Mar-09/9:38 PM
I'll admit, I don't have a clue what you're doing with this. 1*?
Re: prove me wrong by nentwined	nentwined 75.83.196.201	5-Mar-09/9:36 PM
almost titled it "a moment's whine", but that seemed too easy. Almost binned it, but that's what the ranker's for, right? ;)
Re: the end of the world, c'est soir by Bill Z Bub	Bill Z Bub 99.239.12.102	5-Mar-09/5:56 PM
this one is pure automatic. Hrm.
Re: a comment on The Project by malpaso	Bill Z Bub 192.139.153.30	3-Mar-09/10:04 AM
Ah you got me there. I read this every night before I go to sleep, and dream of sweet naked posts in jello.
Re: Graveyard(Cry of the Dead) by alvinb	Bill Z Bub 99.239.12.102	3-Mar-09/5:30 AM
...yeah...no... besides, why whould ghosts hang around boring old tombstone when there is a whole universe to explore?
Re: Ode to the Potato by jessicazee	Bill Z Bub 99.239.12.102	3-Mar-09/5:12 AM
The second stanza is fantastic, "so hopeful the morning of bacon"... indeed it is, indeed it is.
Re: for the slaves and the seekers by Bill Z Bub	Bill Z Bub 192.139.153.30	2-Mar-09/8:40 AM
Glad my delightful tragicomical farce amused you, Blindpoetry. Now, who's up for some flogging?
Re: for the slaves and the seekers by Bill Z Bub	Blindpoetry 68.226.178.153	1-Mar-09/11:13 PM
lol
Re: 9 Things to Eat for Breakfast & Why by A. Nomaly	Bill Z Bub 99.239.12.102	28-Feb-09/11:12 AM
I was just thinking though, what mixes even better with kisses, is Absinthe and tears and when your breath freezes in the air and hangs off your loves hair like icicles shining in the light of passing taxicabs.
Re: Pill-Popper's Confessional by Sasha	Bill Z Bub 99.239.12.102	28-Feb-09/11:09 AM
Last line is aces. A++++++++++ would read again,
Re: the rugby cheer by malpaso	nentwined 75.83.196.201	27-Feb-09/6:00 AM
eh.
Re: Graveyard(Cry of the Dead) by alvinb	nentwined 75.83.196.201	27-Feb-09/5:59 AM
no. no, no, no. no. This is the poetry you have to write and you also have to show nobody ever. well, except us, because we like to yell.
Re: To my Moneta by Bill Z Bub	nentwined 75.83.196.201	27-Feb-09/5:59 AM
awww. thasso sweet! :)
Re: One More, Then We Go by jessicazee	nentwined 75.83.196.201	27-Feb-09/5:58 AM
doesn't cohere for me
Re: Spuna Vs. Turkeef by <{Baba^Yaga}>	nentwined 75.83.196.201	27-Feb-09/5:58 AM
wtf? :) funny. you got funny.
Re: Prelude to Infidelity (edited) by Caducus	nentwined 75.83.196.201	27-Feb-09/5:57 AM
just doesn't work for me; awkward from line to line, s to s. weird, overall, and I like that, but ... eh.