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Prelude to Infidelity (edited) (Free verse) by Caducus
The old doorman coughed hocking phlegm in a silk handkerchief rain filled his pockmarks his smile insincere as a Chelsea mans handshake vice like, tepid. At the end of the street where cold wind is stolen by the shish kebab shop she walked towards me each step leaving Adidas on cart worn pavements. Check in desk pseudonym walnut reflection devil crumbling from an East London voice ‘sign ere and ere love’. Doused by her bleached meat a painted noose strangled me. when I kissed her chest, Jesus danced on a silver noose falling into my mouth leaving bread wine and bitter metal. My pockets turned green and Tchaikovsky brought my wife vibrating out of my pocket in a chariot of light till it laid face down next to a pink bow on black lace. ‘This is wrong I said’ and left with my umbrella

Up the ladder: To Fidel Castro @ 83

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Arithmetic Mean: 3.0
Weighted score: 4.905148
Overall Rank: 9791
Posted: June 9, 2006 4:35 AM PDT; Last modified: October 26, 2008 5:25 AM PDT
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[9] lmp @ 141.154.134.3 | 9-Jun-06/12:11 PM | Reply
wow. a chilling tale, actually.

nicely written.
[9] lmp @ 141.154.134.3 > lmp | 9-Jun-06/12:13 PM | Reply
in retrospect, the title is a little misleading. not actually a "prelude" is it? i mean, you were already "doused by her bleached meat" (unless i misread that line).
[7] Zoe @ 84.13.181.246 | 5-Jul-06/5:14 AM | Reply
There is something really satisfying about the matter-of-fact statement and description here, although some of the images are a bit abstract for me like Tchaikovsky buying my wife...
[3] nentwined @ 75.83.196.201 | 27-Feb-09/5:57 AM | Reply
just doesn't work for me; awkward from line to line, s to s. weird, overall, and I like that, but ... eh.
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