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Ode to the Potato (Free verse) by jessicazee
From this plastic dirty heavy bag: mashed, smashed, Lyonnaised, waffled then curly, baked once, twice, stuffed, hash- browned, American fried, French and freedom too, cottaged, souffléd, whipped lightly as it was their fault - buried in coals, en-foiled or bare, its slice raw sparkling wetly a grinding of salt - so hopeful the morning of bacon; a promise of egg, chive or shallot... a brown lumpy ugliness swells shy with eyes and skin, budge buttered truffles what fed my mother's rooted country peel, my father's mess hall contribution, my instant college box of flakes.

Up the ladder: Behind Closed Doors
Down the ladder: precipitation

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Arithmetic Mean: 7.5
Weighted score: 5.1185646
Overall Rank: 5958
Posted: March 3, 2009 12:36 AM PST; Last modified: March 3, 2009 12:36 AM PST
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[9] Bill Z Bub @ 99.239.12.102 | 3-Mar-09/5:12 AM | Reply
The second stanza is fantastic, "so hopeful the morning of bacon"... indeed it is, indeed it is.
[6] nentwined @ 75.83.196.201 | 5-Mar-09/9:55 PM | Reply
If I was hungry to begin with, I was not by the middle of the first stanza... (and, okay, I wasn't quite hungry, but I _had_ been considering dessert).

Second stanza has more promise, imo.
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