Re: a comment on An Interview With King David by amanda_dcosta	amanda_dcosta 203.145.159.37	26-Feb-06/10:19 AM
Thanks Al. (Your name sounds better this way. It's sounds too hard (harsh) when in full.).... I know what you are getting at. A lot of ideas came to mind when I wrote it, but then, should that stop me from writing what I originally meant to? Atleast this might be some entertainment for a few, perhaps. So enjoy.
Re: The Dead Poet's Dream by drnick	amanda_dcosta 203.145.159.37	26-Feb-06/10:11 AM
Not bad!
Re: Today's Spam by nentwined	Niphredil 132.68.1.29	26-Feb-06/9:39 AM
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Re: cat by Dental Panic	Niphredil 132.68.1.29	26-Feb-06/9:25 AM
isn't it spelled "airborne"? My fave is the first stanza. Terrific :-)
Re: An Interview With King David by amanda_dcosta	ALChemy 24.74.100.11	26-Feb-06/6:15 AM
This is a great idea. Some of the stuff is a little corny and you're likely to receive many a parody from the jokesters on this site se be ready. I found some of this very amusing in a positive way, especially the ending. Lose "lover of god", it sounds sexual no matter how you put it.
Re: Holding on for Jesus by Everyone	ALChemy 24.74.100.11	26-Feb-06/5:57 AM
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Re: Karma by blankel	Sunshine Conkey 64.12.116.6	26-Feb-06/5:41 AM
I have a friend who is really into all that Karma stuff, but personally I'm not into karma or life after death or anything like that. Just wanted to say that your poem flowed pretty good tho.
Re: Holding on for Jesus by Everyone	Sunshine Conkey 64.12.116.6	26-Feb-06/5:37 AM
I'm not really a religious person, but love this poem....I'm saving this one.
Re: a comment on Gaia and Man by Blue Magpie	ALChemy 24.74.100.11	26-Feb-06/5:05 AM
You might have mixed someone elses comment with mine while reading my comment. I'm not asking you to change the rhyme scheme or any of your stanzas. I'm only saying you should add a stanza after every few stanzas of speach that is something other than the speach so that you can break the monotony of the speach. Right now figuratively speaking you have Hamlet doing a monologue through 85% of the play which is fine but not all at once. You might be able to drop some stnzas and still make your point also but length doesn't scare me unless I for some reason end up in prison and I'm stuck with a well endowed cellmate that wants to make me his bitch.
Re: An Interview With King David by amanda_dcosta	amanda_dcosta 203.145.159.37	26-Feb-06/4:37 AM
I have been trying a different style from my usual. It would be helpful to know what you feel about it. I have had this in mind for a long time since Alchemy asked me to be more personal with the biblical characters I was writing about. Ref: some of my earliest poems.
Re: My Shattered Love by Silverjackel	amanda_dcosta 203.145.159.37	26-Feb-06/3:58 AM
Seeing how negative you are in the end justifies why she has to be worse than a typhoon or a cyclone or a twister, what ever you'd call it. I would have liked a more positive ending, you might have got an -8- from me then. Saying that you prayed for her good, rather, would have it going in your favour strongly.
Re: Depression by terbenaw	Silverjackel 65.151.220.136	26-Feb-06/1:08 AM
very well done 9/10
Re: Desperate Revival by Silverjackel	Blue Magpie 212.205.251.35	26-Feb-06/12:58 AM
The focus here is rather in and out of clarity and the poem does not paint a clear picture. For example, the verb mope, is not commensurate with pure despair, it is far to light to follow it. You mope when you are slightly bored or upset. There are also the inversions in the walk/talk lines.
Re: Moonlit Glare by Silverjackel	Blue Magpie 212.205.251.35	26-Feb-06/12:45 AM
Nice
Re: a comment on Today's Spam by nentwined	nentwined 68.232.253.122	26-Feb-06/12:41 AM
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Re: My Shattered Love by Silverjackel	Blue Magpie 212.205.251.35	26-Feb-06/12:40 AM
Its so nice to see love transcending the darkness and shining in the wilderness of our lives.
Re: Today's Spam by nentwined	Blue Magpie 212.205.251.35	26-Feb-06/12:38 AM
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Re: a comment on Spruce Bruce the Barnacle Goose Learns About Moulting by Blue Magpie	Blue Magpie 212.205.251.35	26-Feb-06/12:31 AM
Dear Ranger, Thanks for the comment, but I would have no queries with your pedantism if it helps me find errors in the poem, I have corrected the line you mentioned (on my hard drive) and I also found a few punctuation errors, but no other typos, so if someone else sees them please say something.
Re: a comment on Gaia and Man by Blue Magpie	Blue Magpie 212.205.251.35	26-Feb-06/12:13 AM
Dear Zodiac, Thanks for coming and for the comments, I think I have already responded to the relevent points in other replies.
Re: a comment on Gaia and Man by Blue Magpie	Blue Magpie 212.205.251.35	26-Feb-06/12:12 AM
Dear Alchemy, Thanks for taking the time to both read and comment. I do ofcourse see your point, and was aware of it as I was writing, however to change the rhyme scheme to 2 or 3 rhymes a stanza would really mean rewriting the poem and i am not up to that at the moment, it was quite hard work. The length is not really going to be a problem for people who are into the poetry of the past centuries, in comparison with much that Shelley, Wordsworth, Tennyson and Coleridge wrote it is quite short, not to mention Milton.