Re: Finding Gin and Santa by richa	horus8 24.126.116.245	27-Feb-06/3:33 PM
lol
Re: The And women by INTRANSIT	horus8 24.126.116.245	27-Feb-06/3:32 PM
Needs a new ending.
Re: Today's Spam by nentwined	horus8 24.126.116.245	27-Feb-06/3:29 PM
ha ha...
Re: Highgate Cemetery by longships	terbenaw 68.127.115.210	27-Feb-06/3:28 PM
I'm really feeling this...
Re: a comment on Today's Spam by nentwined	nentwined 68.232.253.122	27-Feb-06/3:10 PM
Nice, especially the goat play. =)
Re: Today's Spam by nentwined	ALChemy 24.74.100.11	27-Feb-06/2:59 PM
Reminds me of this skit:) http://www.yourdailymedia.com/media/1129383135
Re: a comment on Today's Spam by nentwined	nentwined 68.232.253.122	27-Feb-06/12:58 PM
W00+!
Re: Today's Spam by nentwined	INTRANSIT 204.110.228.254	27-Feb-06/12:46 PM
Testing this kiosk. So far so good. I was thinking about the senryu today. Perfect timing. love 'em!
Re: Harp Song of the Prawne Men by -=Dark_Angel=-, P.I.	zodiac 209.193.14.134	27-Feb-06/11:28 AM
Do you have something sound and philosophical about the argument 'If I don't kill person X, he will kill me'? The context is, obviously, Arabs. The person I'm arguing with is a loon, so it's not likely to make much of a difference. Hey, thanks bunches! Tenderly, Curious Hopeless Introvert in Alaska
Re: Desperate Season by Sisterwolf	some deleted user 66.240.35.170	27-Feb-06/11:13 AM
im leaving you a comment because i noticed that you recognized how harsh the people on this site can be. i,too, was wondering how that can be productive in anyway? i just wanted to tell you that i appreciate it...for the people who get that type of criticism
Re: Controlling Desire by maffy	some deleted user 66.240.35.170	27-Feb-06/11:04 AM
this poem is REALLY excellent.
Re: a comment on Recognition by nentwined	Adriaan 198.54.202.18	27-Feb-06/7:22 AM
Thanks for getting Senryu set up as a category. It makes my inner pedant happy!
Re: Empty Chronicles by Scarlett	richa 81.178.217.160	27-Feb-06/6:44 AM
What is a mulberry binder? I thought binders just held paper.
Re: a comment on Gaia and Man by Blue Magpie	richa 81.178.217.160	27-Feb-06/6:40 AM
It is really a case of show don't tell. You start with image then degenerate into dogma. Things like we must cease war with ourselves are so vague as to be meaningless.
Re: Gaia and Man by Blue Magpie	richa 81.178.217.160	27-Feb-06/6:36 AM
The main problem with this poem however is that it attempts to classify the entire human world by using slogans such as 'If Mankind’s soul is ever to find peace this war against itself must surely cease, and man accept his place as just one piece of a far greater whole, this would increase his understanding,'. It would be more productive for you to examine the minutiae of this world view. Use metaphor that kind of thing.
Re: Gaia and Man by Blue Magpie	richa 81.178.217.160	27-Feb-06/6:32 AM
Too many commas it makes your sentences long and rambling. I will use one example: 'One evening ‘midst the glory this entails, just as the sun slipped through checkered rails of distant trees whose awesome height curtails, 07 like troubled thoughts, the view that goes beyond the local scenes of which we are so fond, an owl approached and lighted on a frond.' Firstly: '‘midst the glory this entails,' is redundant because you have not changed scene you are already there midst the glory. Then 'whose awesome height curtails,like troubled thoughts, the view that goes beyond the local scenes of which we are so fond,' is utterly garbled. What happens is the height of the trees curtail ('like troubled thoughts' is nonsense) the view. Full stop. Then you see the owl light on a frond through the rails of light full stop. Otherwise you have clauses all over the place. Also reading your replies I sense you are rather pious. Each to his own and all but I don't think writing earnestly is entirely compatible with writing lines such as 'beard of obvious reknown' and using words such as 'awesome'.
Re: a comment on An Interview With King David by amanda_dcosta	richa 81.178.217.160	27-Feb-06/6:07 AM
I think you should ignore Blue Magpie's advice to put a comma between person and inspired. He seems to have a comma fixation for some reason.
Re: a comment on An Interview With King David by amanda_dcosta	amanda_dcosta 203.145.159.37	27-Feb-06/3:48 AM
Blue Magpie. Thanks! I'm not sure how close it is to being a prose poem. All the same I've tried.
Re: a comment on An Interview With King David by amanda_dcosta	amanda_dcosta 203.145.159.37	27-Feb-06/3:42 AM
Betty? Wow! I'm christened here? lol. By th way, who sang that song.... I forget now.
Re: Empty Chronicles by Scarlett	Blue Magpie 212.205.251.110	27-Feb-06/2:44 AM
Not really my sort of poetry so I can't realy comment on whether it is any good or not, but it seems that a few more commas could be useful, and as a graecophile I would rather Athina than Minerva, but this is just my personal belief that the Greeks were more artistic that the Romans.