Re: a comment on Buddy by ALChemy	Ranger 62.252.32.15	24-Mar-06/1:23 PM
Depends what it's made of. Hmm, 'Godproof hats'...it's a niche market, certainly.
Re: a comment on Mid-July by Ranger	Ranger 62.252.32.15	24-Mar-06/1:21 PM
Thanks Scarlett - that's made my day (well, evening anyway)! It's weird, but when I drafted this first I thought it was utter rubbish - I'm glad I stuck with it now =D Good to see you about!
Re: Dying for Your Sins by drnick	Ranger 62.252.32.15	24-Mar-06/1:17 PM
Good stuff, I think I agree with Dovina about "he's" and "insecurities", maybe replace it with "passions"? Love the wordplay in "rusted tears" (tears cried, tears in the skin). One suggestion; after regrets, how about 'every one finds a way out...' - a little more working around the double meaning in here. Good to see you about, I hope the semester ends well for you!
Re: Butterfly Belly, Orchid Face by Sunny	Scarlett 66.210.233.6	24-Mar-06/12:43 PM
I agree that the ( ) break the flow of this, but otherwise, it's a gem! Many visuals and consistent flood of colors.
Re: portholes in a floating coffin (burial at sea) by FreeFormFixation	Dovina 70.38.78.229	24-Mar-06/12:02 PM
I thought Galivant might me some proper name, since otherwise it's just a varient of "gallivant", but found none. But since you misspelled confounded, I suppose that's all it is - a name you made up. If this is simply about a seance, I'm disappointed.
Re: Dying for Your Sins by drnick	Dovina 70.38.78.229	24-Mar-06/11:52 AM
I think "he's" can be dropped. "insecurities" seems inconsistant with sins and regrets. I like "all his sins" written with no apology or explanation, as if all sins are his. The last line is very revealing.
Re: Mid-July by Ranger	Scarlett 66.210.233.6	24-Mar-06/9:09 AM
Best I've read here thus far. Beautiful flow, beautiful form. Will come back for repeated reads just to sink into the river current that charges these words..
Re: How small, this sleeping tiger by ecargo	Scarlett 66.210.233.6	24-Mar-06/8:02 AM
In this poem, I see "Monkey" - the name I gave to a kitten, found after a storm. My garden was her home and oh, she was stealth in her attack of any leaf floating by... and she could climb like a monkey, fast and furious.. and sleep with the birds in a nest (no kidding). She's an indoor cat now, but all the same hunt games in play. This is a precious poem, filled with the joy in watching the natural beauty of animals.
Re: a comment on Indiscrete by ecargo	Scarlett 66.210.233.6	24-Mar-06/7:55 AM
Lol.. thanks for the positive potential, but I have to say most of my girlfriends would agree with your poem rather than the "giddy, sated and oddly triumphant" view. ;-)
Re: Muff by Stephen Robins	Scarlett 66.210.233.6	24-Mar-06/7:44 AM
Oh my God, this is awful... *still laughing*
Re: a comment on Empty Chronicles by Scarlett	Scarlett 66.210.233.6	24-Mar-06/7:38 AM
Binders have covers and Mulberry is also a color.
Re: a comment on Indiscrete by ecargo	ecargo 167.219.88.140	24-Mar-06/7:07 AM
Well, don't let this discourage you--it's not always like this. Sometimes you wake up giddy, sated, and oddly triumphant. ;-) Thanks for the comment and the vote.
Re: Indiscrete by ecargo	Scarlett 70.171.72.141	24-Mar-06/6:39 AM
An excellent write, tracking that unreachable, uncomfortable feeling after a one-night stand. (never had one myself, but my girlfriends have told me the emotions, much like the ones visually described here)..
Re: a comment on After The Snow/Diamonds And Rust by Ranger	ecargo 167.219.88.140	24-Mar-06/6:14 AM
Well, ultimately your gut has to be the judge. I have my own biases and opinions and gaps in knowledge. I might say "what's Dickens doing here?" because, based on whatever Dickens novels I read a million years ago, my idea of Dickens is ragged waifs and bleak scenes of poverty and whatnot. You or someone else might think, well, duh, Dickens, ghosts of future, past, etc., and think it works perfectly well. Ditto for Cain--I think the connection is tenuous at best. You or others might disagree; find connections I don't see. What I will say is this: if you're putting in extratextual allusions simply to justify a detail--e.g., referencing Dickens as a way to provide context for shawls and scarves--I don't think that's a good enough reason. There are better ways to do it that don't distract and provide more balance or ballast or whatever in the poem. And when you get to the stage where you've figured out how to fix most of what you didn't think worked--that third draft stage or whatever--put it aside and grow some distance. Then go back and see what jars, what people said jarred them, etc., and then have a go at tweaking it. Anyway--Ranger Nightingale. What kind of hitman name is that? http://www.biovox.com/generators/hitman.asp
Re: a comment on Buddy by ALChemy	ALChemy 24.74.100.11	24-Mar-06/6:12 AM
It's my first draft so it's a little ruff (Get it,"Ruff"?:)hehehehe...
Re: a comment on Buddy by ALChemy	ALChemy 24.74.100.11	24-Mar-06/6:09 AM
Is that on his answering machine?
Re: a comment on Buddy by ALChemy	ALChemy 24.74.100.11	24-Mar-06/6:08 AM
I wear a hat alot. I figure if it's really God, the hat won't get in the way.
Re: Indianapolis Since by matt door	Caducus 80.168.238.75	24-Mar-06/1:22 AM
wide eyed field is a good line giving possibilities of the sun being the eye or blooms. The sentiment is nice but you should learn to curb sarcasm and disrespectful digs because it gives you a superioeity complex that will not win you respect on here.
Re: After The Snow/Diamonds And Rust by Ranger	drnick 24.176.22.254	24-Mar-06/12:59 AM
Hey Ranger, its been a while. This is good, I like the fourth stanza the best. I also like the repeated line "well I'll be damned." And I can totally relate to the lines "And you haven't visited for a while/ I still think you're beautiful." I'm sorry I can't pur forth a more meaningful responce, but I am drunk. Big surprise. After this semester I'll be back in full, but right now I have no time for poemranker.com =[ Keep up the good work, man.
Re: a comment on yo yo yo, ride by FreeFormFixation	FreeFormFixation 70.225.168.60	23-Mar-06/10:35 PM
i'm glad you do. obviously, it's about how much of a hypocrite i am.