Re: a comment on My Prayer by amanda_dcosta	amanda_dcosta 203.145.159.44	29-Mar-06/9:58 PM
Yeah, shameless of you! How could you? ;-)
Re: a comment on My Prayer by amanda_dcosta	amanda_dcosta 203.145.159.44	29-Mar-06/9:55 PM
Yeah, I'm not trying to draw anyone into my faith, it's just that I'm searching for more answers to ease my faith and make it more clearer, and there's no better way for me than to ask the Holy Spirit to help and guide me. I believe in being simple and relating to the simple, and hence you will find most of my work absolutely and down to earth simple. ecargo, you might find my poem 'Through the channel' a bit interesting, as it gives a bit of being spiritual without the mention of 'God' in it. If you haven't read it yet, you might find it interesting, hopefully.
Re: Behind the storm clouds, the moon consoles the sun.(edited) by ALChemy	drnick 24.176.22.254	29-Mar-06/9:51 PM
I am confused as to what is going on here...the mother is the sky, and the father is light? Your niece is a source of her father? I like the thought here, I think you have a good idea, but I would suggest reworking the comparisons.
Re: SOMETIMES? by Garrett S Sexton	matt door 65.32.138.73	29-Mar-06/6:51 PM
Is this for some reason almost funny? Or just acutely sad? Garrett - this seems to be pure unadulterated shit. Or is it just me?
Re: A Lover's Lament by woodstock20000	matt door 65.32.138.73	29-Mar-06/6:41 PM
I like the simplicity and regret, but the fluency and word choice could be revised.
Re: Sarah, Freefalling (twee for AlChemy) by ecargo	matt door 65.32.138.73	29-Mar-06/6:31 PM
Seems tired - like it's been done before now? It is a good poem - just not striking - "white-faced hills" and "rasberry girl" seems to have been written before? Or is it just my feeble mind?
Re: a comment on Behind the storm clouds, the moon consoles the sun.(edited) by ALChemy	Dovina 17.255.240.138	29-Mar-06/3:21 PM
The problem with tweaking the ending is that I would not have known the sun is the child, or that the moon is you, without your explanation. Therefore, I would not have known anything about the child, whether she was happy, sad, smiling, except for what the last line says. From tht unknowing position, it could go either way.
Re: Sarah, Freefalling (twee for AlChemy) by ecargo	Niphredil 132.69.238.221	29-Mar-06/2:57 PM
This is such a wonderful piece of work! It's so vibrant and exudes so much joie de vivre that it even had the power to perk me up after a long day of tedious resistors and capacitors. Am I the first comment? Yay me. -10- + fave.
Re: SOMETIMES? by Garrett S Sexton	ecargo 167.219.88.140	29-Mar-06/1:44 PM
IN THE TRAY? KSKSKSKSSK
Re: a comment on Mirror by Sunny	Sunny 65.118.48.2	29-Mar-06/12:23 PM
Wow there cowboy! You have poor interpretation skills. Good luck on your next "critique". P.S.-I never write of myself by the way...or my appearance.
Re: SOMETIMES? by Garrett S Sexton	Garrett S Sexton 86.142.147.68	29-Mar-06/12:22 PM
So you don't like it then Mr. or Mrs. Anon. You could at least say why. All criticism is valid. P.S. I am now 30.
Re: a comment on A look inside [someone real} by Garrett S Sexton	Garrett S Sexton 86.142.147.68	29-Mar-06/12:19 PM
Unfortunately we are all guilty of being twotts. The young div mare has woolened our eyes. All I will say to you is ... WHASSSUPP! Amy Lee (Evanescence) Google it.
Re: a comment on Time Will Change by x0lovelylarnx0	Garrett S Sexton 86.142.147.68	29-Mar-06/12:14 PM
There is a bug in my computer. "THEWORK" is how they say the work in Olde Sussex.
Re: a comment on Time Will Change by x0lovelylarnx0	Garrett S Sexton 86.142.147.68	29-Mar-06/12:13 PM
"THEWORK"
Re: The Ballad of Fraser Allonby Q.C., Barrister-At-Law by wFraser Allonby Q.C.w	Garrett S Sexton 86.142.147.68	29-Mar-06/12:08 PM
POEMWANKER,SAYS IT ALL!
Re: The Ballad of Fraser Allonby Q.C., Barrister-At-Law by wFraser Allonby Q.C.w	Garrett S Sexton 86.142.147.68	29-Mar-06/12:05 PM
Hobbit poems R funny.
Re: Mirror by Sunny	Garrett S Sexton 86.142.147.68	29-Mar-06/11:58 AM
I love mirrors! Do you not? This takes all there magic away. Why? Whats with you, and ya appearance? HORRIBLE, JUST HORRIBLE! Am I taking this to seriously? 4
Re: A Melody by MacFrantic	Garrett S Sexton 86.142.147.68	29-Mar-06/11:49 AM
Unique character. Powerful form, slighly up it's own botty. 7
Re: a comment on My Prayer by amanda_dcosta	Garrett S Sexton 86.142.147.68	29-Mar-06/11:43 AM
I GET MY JOLLY FROM THAT LOLLY. PINK, FLESHY LIFE GIVER. WOMEN OR MEN? BOW DOWN. SUCCUMB! OUR PASSAGE THROUGH. WITHOUT IT. IS BUT NUMB!
Re: a comment on Time Will Change by x0lovelylarnx0	x0lovelylarnx0 152.163.100.10	29-Mar-06/11:30 AM
For one thing I'm certaintly not a man. Sometimes a short poem has more meaning than a long poem. I'm not 9. Some of your poems like like they were written by 5 year olds. Learn how to spell. You couldn't possibly be mature to have put I like horny girls in your profile. How can you say no rudeness intended? That is definitely a rude comment to say the work is lame, but if you put it the way you did: THEWORK IS LAME. I don't know what THEWORK means doesn't look like a word to me.