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Free verse № 141430

Mirror

Member since 2006 · Posted 27 Mar 2006 · 4 comments

An oval mercury marvels at my own oval face; an agreeance of flaw and speck of sun. A surface that appears like a precious metal, hardened, with a perfect sheen…but merely a mirror. Mirror is hung on walls in a home and in office walls-anywhere, showing the inevitable- the formal and the trash, the transparent liar who seethes, the man who sinks into his chair’s cushion with guilt and the saint that ignites with white fire. The mirror sees angry faces and gorging mouths that open and shut. Mirror’s in bedrooms see tousled sheets, clamped bodies and a come down of all the static. Mirror cannot hear but sees the daily tango of the soul in each sunrise, in each dance. Mirror eyes see the mercury you, painted all over this room.

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[7] Dovina 27-Mar-06/6:34 PM Reply
The first line bewilders me. Mercury, lying on a plate, spreads out in what could be an oval, and reflects like a mirror. The poem makes sense after I pass that obstacle, and until mercury appears at the end. But there, it must be some metaphor. Okay, I must have it all wrong.
[9] ecargo 28-Mar-06/7:14 AM Reply
Some good lines and details in this. I like your showing what the mirror shoes, in people and in rooms--like "tousled sheets, clamped bodies." "Tango of the soul" strikes me as a little hackneyed. Really good overall.
[4] Garrett S Sexton 29-Mar-06/11:58 AM Reply
I love mirrors! Do you not?
This takes all there magic away.
Why?
Whats with you, and ya appearance?
HORRIBLE, JUST HORRIBLE!

Am I taking this to seriously?
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[n/a] Sunny › Garrett S Sexton 29-Mar-06/12:23 PM Reply
Wow there cowboy! You have poor interpretation skills. Good luck on your next "critique".

P.S.-I never write of myself by the way...or my appearance.