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Mirror (Free verse) by Sunny
An oval mercury marvels at my own oval face; an agreeance of flaw and speck of sun. A surface that appears like a precious metal, hardened, with a perfect sheen…but merely a mirror. Mirror is hung on walls in a home and in office walls-anywhere, showing the inevitable- the formal and the trash, the transparent liar who seethes, the man who sinks into his chair’s cushion with guilt and the saint that ignites with white fire. The mirror sees angry faces and gorging mouths that open and shut. Mirror’s in bedrooms see tousled sheets, clamped bodies and a come down of all the static. Mirror cannot hear but sees the daily tango of the soul in each sunrise, in each dance. Mirror eyes see the mercury you, painted all over this room.

Up the ladder: Dreams (senyru)
Down the ladder: Crowded

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Arithmetic Mean: 5.6
Weighted score: 5.0715218
Overall Rank: 6584
Posted: March 27, 2006 1:26 PM PST; Last modified: March 27, 2006 1:26 PM PST
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[7] Dovina @ 70.38.78.229 | 27-Mar-06/6:34 PM | Reply
The first line bewilders me. Mercury, lying on a plate, spreads out in what could be an oval, and reflects like a mirror. The poem makes sense after I pass that obstacle, and until mercury appears at the end. But there, it must be some metaphor. Okay, I must have it all wrong.
[9] ecargo @ 167.219.88.140 | 28-Mar-06/7:14 AM | Reply
Some good lines and details in this. I like your showing what the mirror shoes, in people and in rooms--like "tousled sheets, clamped bodies." "Tango of the soul" strikes me as a little hackneyed. Really good overall.
[4] Garrett S Sexton @ 86.142.147.68 | 29-Mar-06/11:58 AM | Reply
I love mirrors! Do you not?
This takes all there magic away.
Why?
Whats with you, and ya appearance?
HORRIBLE, JUST HORRIBLE!

Am I taking this to seriously?
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[n/a] Sunny @ 65.118.48.2 > Garrett S Sexton | 29-Mar-06/12:23 PM | Reply
Wow there cowboy! You have poor interpretation skills. Good luck on your next "critique".

P.S.-I never write of myself by the way...or my appearance.
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