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A look inside [someone real} (Free verse) by Garrett S Sexton
The words have been drained from this pencil.
Sweet words that I want to give you,
and I can't sleep.
I need to tell you, goodnight
When we're together I feel perfect?
When I'm pulled away from you I FALL APART!
All you say is sacred to me.
your eyes are so blue.
I can't look away as we lay in stillness.
You whisper to me?
Joshua MARRY ME!
For all this you'll stay with me?
Ohh, you don't have to ask me.
You know your all I live for.
You know I'd die, hold you,stay with you.
SOME HOW I WILL SHOW YOU!
Show you that you are my night sky.
I've always been right behind you.
Now I'll always be right beside you.
SO MANY NIGHTS CRIED MYSELF TO SLEEP.
NOW THAT YOU LOVE ME!I love myself?
I never thought I would say that.
I NEVER THOUGHT I WOULD BE YOU!
THE END.
I cannot lay claim to this poem, it came from the heart of a 16 year old
girl. I liberated it from my current squeezes 15 year old son's bedroom,
with his permission because it is so good I bring it to you. PLEASE
COMMENT.
ABOUT THE ARTIST
Jamie and Josh have split for good, though she clings he has slowly but
gently has pushed her away. No kith nor kin that like her, and a mind
not unlike that of a ten year old, it was BIZARRE then that she dumped
him. He now, being a nice chap had the perfect escape. She had cancer
young, nearly died so is clingy to Mum. However, Mum and 3 half sisters,
all by different dads treat her like Cinderella.
I WHO WALK THE LAND LIKE THE BUDDHA NOTICED THS BAD KARMA SHE OOZES.
Anyway it's still a good poem because it's real,
she isn't trying to impress. IT wasn't meant 4 YOUR EYES!
Revised for the twotts amongst you.
P.S. I never said I was an academic. There were reasons it was rushed.
Though revising her poem, I feel it has taken a little bit of the heart
out of it. A TWOTT is a swot that shows itself to be a TWAT.
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Arithmetic Mean: 1.3333334
Weighted score: 4.5629225
Overall Rank: 12654
Posted: March 25, 2006 2:06 AM PST; Last modified: March 28, 2006 9:50 AM PST
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I'd save the insults if I were you. They really don't improve the poem at all.