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Sarah, Freefalling (twee for AlChemy) (Free verse) by ecargo
My pink girl flies off the verge
of the world, all aplomb.
I stand numb, watch her surge
down the throat of the plunge.
She chases the sweeping cirrus clouds
that swirl like windflung feathers,
outraces the deepening shadow shroud
over white-faced hills, braver than her brothers.
The windâs loose grasp unfurls her,
spins her short curls to coronas,
shining, sunstreaking raspberry girl, her
long shadow streaming behind her, alone as
I, clinging frozen to this whitest of walls,
until her echoing laughter reminds me
how to fly off the rim in a glorious fall.
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Arithmetic Mean: 8.5
Weighted score: 6.75
Overall Rank: 464
Posted: March 29, 2006 1:38 PM PST; Last modified: March 29, 2006 1:38 PM PST
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Am I the first comment? Yay me. -10- + fave.