Re: FISH by annadoc	god'swife 71.103.98.44	28-Apr-06/12:55 AM
You have no grasp on human existence. I cannot even venture to guess what childhood atrocities must have been inflicited on you to make you want to write such an empty and uninspired piece of shit as this. You're just one more sorry ass strutting around in this pitiful sanctuary for self-important asses. This drivel lacks all relevancy. Is this what you sit around pondering about? Is this the most intriguing most profound most soulful experience you can write about? What the fuck, are you some kind of horrible mutant? Try 'writing' something pertinent, germane, material, apropos to the soul and its struggle. It's tragic that such a bunch of heartless pukes have turned a once stimulating arena of thought into a incestuious hotbed of superfluous and inferior banter. The fact that some idiots feel it neccessary, let alone plausible, to leave comments on such atrocities is only more proof that you've all completely lost connection with the drama of human existence. You should all be ashamed of yourselves. Get a life. A real one consisting of love and loss, pain and exrutiating ecxtasy, the awareness of our absurd and fleeting existence. You're all stuck in a boring putrid land of make believe. Fucking losers. You write like an epiletic having a fit.
Re: Deja Vu by sliver	god'swife 71.103.98.44	28-Apr-06/12:53 AM
You have no grasp on human existence. I cannot even venture to guess what childhood atrocities must have been inflicited on you to make you want to write such an empty and uninspired piece of shit as this. You're just one more sorry ass strutting around in this pitiful sanctuary for self-important asses. This drivel lacks all relevancy. Is this what you sit around pondering about? Is this the most intriguing most profound most soulful experience you can write about? What the fuck, are you some kind of horrible mutant? Try 'writing' something pertinent, germane, material, apropos to the soul and its struggle. It's tragic that such a bunch of heartless pukes have turned a once stimulating arena of thought into a incestuious hotbed of superfluous and inferior banter. The fact that some idiots feel it neccessary, let alone plausible, to leave comments on such atrocities is only more proof that you've all completely lost connection with the drama of human existence. You should all be ashamed of yourselves. Get a life. A real one consisting of love and loss, pain and exrutiating ecxtasy, the awareness of our absurd and fleeting existence. You're all stuck in a boring putrid land of make believe. Fucking losers. You are vague. Your poem is vague. Your life is one vague boring monotone.
Re: Meditation on the Future by MacFrantic	god'swife 71.103.98.44	28-Apr-06/12:51 AM
You have no grasp on human existence. I cannot even venture to guess what childhood atrocities must have been inflicited on you to make you want to write such an empty and uninspired piece of shit as this. You're just one more sorry ass strutting around in this pitiful sanctuary for self-important asses. This drivel lacks all relevancy. Is this what you sit around pondering about? Is this the most intriguing most profound most soulful experience you can write about? What the fuck, are you some kind of horrible mutant? Try 'writing' something pertinent, germane, material, apropos to the soul and its struggle. It's tragic that such a bunch of heartless pukes have turned a once stimulating arena of thought into a incestuious hotbed of superfluous and inferior banter. The fact that some idiots feel it neccessary, let alone plausible, to leave comments on such atrocities is only more proof that you've all completely lost connection with the drama of human existence. You should all be ashamed of yourselves. Get a life. A real one consisting of love and loss, pain and exrutiating ecxtasy, the awareness of our absurd and fleeting existence. You're all stuck in a boring putrid land of make believe. Fucking losers. You can't dash away? Who really dashes, in real life i mean, who dashes? You corny idiot.
Re: Cry by Sunny	god'swife 71.103.98.44	28-Apr-06/12:49 AM
You have no grasp on human existence. I cannot even venture to guess what childhood atrocities must have been inflicited on you to make you want to write such an empty and uninspired piece of shit as this. You're just one more sorry ass strutting around in this pitiful sanctuary for self-important asses. This drivel lacks all relevancy. Is this what you sit around pondering about? Is this the most intriguing most profound most soulful experience you can write about? What the fuck, are you some kind of horrible mutant? Try 'writing' something pertinent, germane, material, apropos to the soul and its struggle. It's tragic that such a bunch of heartless pukes have turned a once stimulating arena of thought into a incestuious hotbed of superfluous and inferior banter. The fact that some idiots feel it neccessary, let alone plausible, to leave comments on such atrocities is only more proof that you've all completely lost connection with the drama of human existence. You should all be ashamed of yourselves. Get a life. A real one consisting of love and loss, pain and exrutiating ecxtasy, the awareness of our absurd and fleeting existence. You're all stuck in a boring putrid land of make believe. Fucking losers.
Re: Portrait Paradelle by Enkidu	god'swife 71.103.98.44	28-Apr-06/12:49 AM
You have no grasp on human existence. I cannot even venture to guess what childhood atrocities must have been inflicited on you to make you want to write such an empty and uninspired piece of shit as this. You're just one more sorry ass strutting around in this pitiful sanctuary for self-important asses. This drivel lacks all relevancy. Is this what you sit around pondering about? Is this the most intriguing most profound most soulful experience you can write about? What the fuck, are you some kind of horrible mutant? Try 'writing' something pertinent, germane, material, apropos to the soul and its struggle. It's tragic that such a bunch of heartless pukes have turned a once stimulating arena of thought into a incestuious hotbed of superfluous and inferior banter. The fact that some idiots feel it neccessary, let alone plausible, to leave comments on such atrocities is only more proof that you've all completely lost connection with the drama of human existence. You should all be ashamed of yourselves. Get a life. A real one consisting of love and loss, pain and exrutiating ecxtasy, the awareness of our absurd and fleeting existence. You're all stuck in a boring putrid land of make believe. Fucking losers.
Re: Euclidian Insanity by tryplsyted	god'swife 71.103.98.44	28-Apr-06/12:48 AM
You have no grasp on human existence. I cannot even venture to guess what childhood atrocities must have been inflicited on you to make you want to write such an empty and uninspired piece of shit as this. You're just one more sorry ass strutting around in this pitiful sanctuary for self-important asses. This drivel lacks all relevancy. Is this what you sit around pondering about? Is this the most intriguing most profound most soulful experience you can write about? What the fuck, are you some kind of horrible mutant? Try 'writing' something pertinent, germane, material, apropos to the soul and its struggle. It's tragic that such a bunch of heartless pukes have turned a once stimulating arena of thought into a incestuious hotbed of superfluous and inferior banter. The fact that some idiots feel it neccessary, let alone plausible, to leave comments on such atrocities is only more proof that you've all completely lost connection with the drama of human existence. You should all be ashamed of yourselves. Get a life. A real one consisting of love and loss, pain and exrutiating ecxtasy, the awareness of our absurd and fleeting existence. You're all stuck in a boring putrid land of make believe. Fucking losers.
Re: a comment on To Brittany by amanda_dcosta	amanda_dcosta 203.145.159.44	27-Apr-06/11:55 PM
Ranger, thanks a ton. I like reading your reviews. When I was writing this, I kept racking my brain for a word instead of 'gap' and couldn't come up with an appropriate alternative. If you have any suggestion for it be free to share. I wd be interested.
Re: a comment on To Brittany by amanda_dcosta	amanda_dcosta 203.145.159.44	27-Apr-06/11:46 PM
Enkidu, thank you. It's nice to see you around my pages. Thanks. 'Cherub' - the idea behind it is to describe the child as having an angelic, innocent, heavenly spirit. Hence the usage.
Re: a comment on To Brittany by amanda_dcosta	amanda_dcosta 203.145.159.44	27-Apr-06/11:42 PM
Dovina, hi! and thanks for your vote and critique. why "til"? I don't get that part of your sugggestion. And for the rest of the stuff,"Touch a patch of land that needs you most" , well, as far as sun's rays are needed, all things do, land does and so on. But maybe there's some place that needs to be warmed up urgently, like a cold lonely heart wanting to be warmed up by friendship, perhaps. So there's an essence of wanting a beam of light to filter through the clouds and landing right on target. Bingo, bulls eye! That's the idea behind it. And as for the last line, it's 'my' on purpose. If nothing else , she might just touch my heart, as she's already begun to.
Re: Euclidian Insanity by tryplsyted	Enkidu 172.190.177.237	27-Apr-06/9:02 PM
This could be more polished, but chances are it wouldn't be nearly as good. Loved the title, love the poem, kudos. *10*
Re: 99% of the Time by TLRufener	Enkidu 172.190.177.237	27-Apr-06/8:54 PM
Uggh. *5*
Re: one by Adriaan	Enkidu 172.190.177.237	27-Apr-06/8:52 PM
Not my chalice of wine. *6*
Re: one by Adriaan	Enkidu 172.190.177.237	27-Apr-06/8:52 PM
Not chalice of wine. *6*
Re: Fraser's Wedding by Stephen Robins	Enkidu 172.190.177.237	27-Apr-06/8:48 PM
What a happy ending...*9*
Re: First Warm Day on Santa Barbara Bay by Dovina	Enkidu 172.190.177.237	27-Apr-06/8:46 PM
Solid title, solid poem, 'nuff said.*8*
Re: Tang Soo Do See Do by ecargo	Enkidu 172.190.177.237	27-Apr-06/8:43 PM
Very original, very good. I was thoroughly entertained. *9*
Re: To Brittany by amanda_dcosta	Enkidu 172.190.177.237	27-Apr-06/8:42 PM
I think "cherub" is a bit out of place, nonetheless, this is pretty good. I especially liked the second stanza. *8*
Re: FISH by annadoc	Enkidu 172.190.177.237	27-Apr-06/8:40 PM
Eh...I hate wishing I skipped a very mediocre poem, sorry. *5*
Re: Deja Vu by sliver	Enkidu 172.190.177.237	27-Apr-06/8:36 PM
I have too agree with Dovina, no real substance. Not worth remembering. *6*
Re: Cry by Sunny	Enkidu 172.190.177.237	27-Apr-06/8:35 PM
Not bad, I loved the line breaks. *8*