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Tang Soo Do See Do (Concrete) by ecargo
Low block front punch feint jab dance back high kick side kick tap block high dodge right spin kick sweep punch punch and duck dance in retreat not quick enough to block the kick a BURST a BLOOM bow out repeat

Down the ladder: Mephistophelian Seductress

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Arithmetic Mean: 8.285714
Weighted score: 5.8836646
Overall Rank: 1523
Posted: April 26, 2006 8:06 AM PDT; Last modified: April 26, 2006 8:31 AM PDT
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[9] Ranger @ 62.252.32.15 | 26-Apr-06/11:39 AM | Reply
Energetic - I felt the sharp breaths and sounds of martial artistry here. Is Tang Soo Do an offensive or defensive discipline?
I can't tell whether there's a definite object pictured here but I like the arrowing of it; conversely it also resembles the way the body folds if you've been hit in the stomach. The lines which 'stick out' a little also give the impression of speed lines.
Or it could be a top-down starship...
[9] Enkidu @ 172.190.177.237 | 27-Apr-06/8:43 PM | Reply
Very original, very good. I was thoroughly entertained. *9*
[10] amanda_dcosta @ 203.145.159.37 | 29-Apr-06/12:03 PM | Reply
ecargo... hmmm this is pretty good. Not particulary to my taste, but even then I think I must be frank and fair. You deserve a 10.

P.S. Ironically, this is the stuff I vote a zero here in my home. Punches and jabs..... I'm scared to see it physically, wondering when my kids (biggest kid - my husband) will end up with stitches (which is nothing new). An in the end my husband stands and bows pretending to be the winner among the lot. Proudly. :-)
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