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Tang Soo Do See Do (Concrete) by ecargo Low
block
front punch
feint
jab
dance back
high kick
side kick
tap
block high
dodge right
spin kick
sweep
punch
punch
and duck
dance in
retreat
not quick
enough
to block
the kick
a BURST
a BLOOM
bow out
repeat
Up the ladder:
Surfacing
Down the ladder:
On Going Blind
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 8.285714
Posted: April 26, 2006 8:06 AM PDT; Last modified: April 26, 2006 8:31 AM PDTWeighted score: 5.8836646 Overall Rank: 1523 Comments:
Very original, very good. I was thoroughly entertained. *9*
ecargo... hmmm this is pretty good. Not particulary to my taste, but even then I think I must be frank and fair. You deserve a 10.
P.S. Ironically, this is the stuff I vote a zero here in my home. Punches and jabs..... I'm scared to see it physically, wondering when my kids (biggest kid - my husband) will end up with stitches (which is nothing new). An in the end my husband stands and bows pretending to be the winner among the lot. Proudly. :-) 281 view(s)
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I can't tell whether there's a definite object pictured here but I like the arrowing of it; conversely it also resembles the way the body folds if you've been hit in the stomach. The lines which 'stick out' a little also give the impression of speed lines.
Or it could be a top-down starship...