Re: The Angry Bush by wilco	Edna Sweetlove 81.179.85.105	23-May-06/10:32 AM
Not very subtle but the message is OK.
Re: Numbers In Heaven by Dovina	Edna Sweetlove 81.179.85.105	23-May-06/10:31 AM
Obscure.
Re: American Poet by horus8	Edna Sweetlove 81.179.85.105	23-May-06/10:29 AM
Pretentious and ungrammatical. An interesting combination, but not a very attractive one.
Re: a comment on A Prayer For God's Soldiers As They Kill For Him by Edna Sweetlove	Edna Sweetlove 81.179.85.105	23-May-06/10:27 AM
Dear Wilco, Thank you for your comment; I'd agree with your first point, but have to say NO to your question. He is a c***.
Re: a comment on A Prayer For God's Soldiers As They Kill For Him by Edna Sweetlove	Edna Sweetlove 81.179.85.105	23-May-06/10:26 AM
Dear horus8: what's a carreer, you rude sod?
Re: a comment on A Prayer For God's Soldiers As They Kill For Him by Edna Sweetlove	Edna Sweetlove 81.179.85.105	23-May-06/10:25 AM
Dear Dovina: I only delete stupid comments from stupid people. Especially people who use phrases like "fricking program" and who overuse exclamantion marks.
Re: Youth by thepinkbunnyofdoom	Edna Sweetlove 81.179.85.105	23-May-06/10:23 AM
I could only get as far as the first few lines. When I read words like "choken" I give up. Also I am sad your donkeys are broken.
Re: I hate people by Bazilla	Edna Sweetlove 81.179.85.105	23-May-06/10:20 AM
Passable. Dubious use of apostrophes.
Re: I hate people by Bazilla	Edna Sweetlove 81.179.85.105	23-May-06/10:20 AM
Passable. Dubious use of apostrophes.
Re: Split Me by Sunny	LilMsLadyPoet 64.12.116.14	23-May-06/9:53 AM
I'm lost...I couldn't wrap my brain around where you were going with this! There were some good lines, and imagery, though.
Re: Numbers add to nothing by Caducus	LilMsLadyPoet 64.12.116.14	23-May-06/9:49 AM
The end fell flat, and rang hollow and disconnected...which is good, in this case! I notice you are an impartial observer all the way until the last line, then you pronounce some sort of judgment on it all. I am not sure of what your judgment is. Does his death change nothing, are you speaking to nothing changes in America because America continues to put people on death row and use capital punishment, or are you saying capital punishment changes nothing and killing goes on as usual? Or that his life and death is nothing because he is nothing? Or that his death changed nothing in the lives of those affected by his murders? I hate having to title things! But that said, I think it needs a better title. I don't mind it the way it is, as it leaves one to question what it is about, and to re=read to try to figure those questions out...which is never fully answered, for the reader. I wouldn't mind it being more clear, in showing your judgment either, though.
Re: Monsters by wilco	ALChemy 71.75.176.68	23-May-06/9:20 AM
Like Jim Morrison and John Lennon dueling. A little disassembled between stanzas but put in the voice of an effective singer it could work quite well.
Re: Monsters by wilco	some deleted user 64.140.228.131	23-May-06/4:53 AM
Not your best, but very good work.
Re: Godproof Hat by Dovina	Niphredil 132.68.55.85	23-May-06/2:26 AM
Um, sorry, but this ain't a limerick. At least, the first stanza isn't. Alhough the rhyming scheme matches (aabba), limericks have very well-defined meter (three stressed syllables in lines 1,2,5 and two in lines 3,4) and this doesn't really fit the bill. Because of the differences in meter (and language, too, come to think of it), the second stanza appears quite unrelated to the first. Having said that, it's a funny, amusing piece of work... I especially liked the first stanza.
Re: Godproof Hat by Dovina	ALChemy 71.75.176.68	22-May-06/10:11 PM
The last stanza reminds me of the closing animation of every Flintstone episode.
Re: The balls of Thor by John Rambo	ALChemy 71.75.176.68	22-May-06/9:52 PM
Vikin' aye man!
Re: Split Me by Sunny	wilco 24.92.74.122	22-May-06/8:55 PM
soooo, you're cutting the carrot...and while you're distracted by the flowers, the carrot takes it's revenge and starts cutting you!? I don't think that's what you were going for, but that's the first image I got and I think that's super.
Re: Seizures by Sunny	wilco 24.92.74.122	22-May-06/8:49 PM
Never had a seizure, so I don't know..it sounds all right to me (the poem, not having seizures).
Re: Play ball he said by thepinkbunnyofdoom	wilco 24.92.74.122	22-May-06/8:47 PM
I don't want to read this....I'll just give you a 5 and we'll call it even?
Re: Numbers add to nothing by Caducus	wilco 24.92.74.122	22-May-06/8:43 PM
And millions of tax dollars wasted supporting some asshole for 34 years that could've been saved on his court date with 1 bullet.