Re: Aristocrats(Madlib for all those shock poets) by ALChemy	Ranger 86.131.51.97	1-Jul-06/12:13 AM
I can't even accuse you of not giving me ample warning about this, because you did. And now I have to work all day with this, struggling not to superimpose all the customers I come across onto the scene... Good stuff for a saturday morning chortle!
Re: Patio 95 by ecargo	Ranger 86.131.51.97	1-Jul-06/12:09 AM
This is extremely effective as a 'waiting-and-foreboding' piece, stanza 2 in particular. 'Flashing mimic bird', 'dark west', 'black locusts'. All excellent. But, dammit, I've used reference to wind & sea in the poem I was going to submit today...I think I'll leave it for a while... All round top stuff as is to be expected and like ALChemy says, I'm glad to see you around :-)
Re: a comment on Late Break by MacFrantic	Ranger 86.131.51.97	1-Jul-06/12:02 AM
I get what you mean, it has never been a word to appeal to me poetically though. But, as lots of people say, each to their own.
Re: a comment on Aristocrats(Madlib for all those shock poets) by ALChemy	ALChemy 71.75.188.128	30-Jun-06/7:59 PM
I can tell you read the original. I salute you for finding a way to make this disgusting joke only mildly offensive. This joke goes all the way back to Vaudeville days and a documentary featuring 100 celebrity comedians telling the joke was made. Just thought these shock poets should know where their roots are.
Re: Aristocrats(Madlib for all those shock poets) by ALChemy	Dovina 12.72.34.123	30-Jun-06/3:59 PM
The most vile and disgusting act ever thought up by man or woman would be (let me think) whiffing that foul bag of rotten air, Stephen Robins, from closer than a mile. But I don’t see how vile and disgusting acts relate to this story. Many interpretations are possible, but I find this one especially appealing: A man walks into a talent agent's office, and says, "We're a family act, and we'd like you to represent us." The agent says, "Sorry, I don't represent family acts. They're a little too old-fashioned." The man says, "But, this is really special." The agent says, "Okay, well what's the act?" He replies, "Well, my wife and I come out on stage and she begins to sing the Star Spangled Banner while I massage her roughly from behind. After a minute of this, my daughters come out and begin to do the same, but my son's singing the original To Anacreon in Heaven lyrics while my daughter performs physical therapy on her." The agent looks uncomfortable, but the man ontinues, "Just when my wife hits the highest note in the song, my children and I switch partners. He turns my wife around and gives her a pat before having her perform armless and legless hugs on him. When the song's over and we're both getting close, we all stop and lay down on the stage." The man smiles fondly as he recalls, "This is the best part: our dog then comes out on the stage, and he's trained to massage each one of us to relaxation in turn. He just goes right down the line, looking as happy as can be! We all get up and take a bow." He looks at the agent and says, "Well, that's the act. What do you think?" The agent just sits in silence for a long time. Finally, he manages, "That's a hell of an act. What do you call yourselves?" "The Aristocrats!" The man replies.
Re: Patio 95 by ecargo	ALChemy 71.75.188.128	30-Jun-06/2:22 PM
Nice to see you around.
Re: COCK by Stephen Robins	ecargo 167.219.88.140	30-Jun-06/1:17 PM
"Cock" makes me giggle like a 14-yr old. The word, I mean. Only sometimes the appendage. "Thy," so "doth" to be anal about it? "Bellend does cling/ . . . Genital bling"--hee, nice. Obligatory 10.
Re: a comment on How to Bleed by MacFrantic	ecargo 167.219.88.140	30-Jun-06/1:12 PM
Stephen Robins! "Sarbanes-Oxley"? Never say you're an accountant! It would be so very disillusioning.
Re: How to Bleed by MacFrantic	ecargo 167.219.88.140	30-Jun-06/1:11 PM
More fragment than poem; hard to connect w/it. Needs flesh. ;)
Re: Fallen Charub by Dovina	ALChemy 71.75.188.128	30-Jun-06/10:53 AM
2 dozen roses mailed to the address of Dovina Goddess of the Grey-blue ocean of poetry.
Re: Fallen Charub by Dovina	amanda_dcosta 202.164.138.126	30-Jun-06/10:49 AM
ha ha ha ha... sorry but don't get me wrong. I'm laughing all over.
Re: Lovers east of the Coombe by Caducus	amanda_dcosta 202.164.138.126	30-Jun-06/9:20 AM
Lovely imagery.
Re: comfort by the indign	amanda_dcosta 202.164.138.126	30-Jun-06/8:42 AM
This is pretty good. I would also like it if you'd use upper case letter whereever necessary. I like the theme you chose and how you've presented it.
Re: Luke Hanney's 43rd Dream by lukehanney	CherokeeRoseLoggins 71.31.231.183	30-Jun-06/8:33 AM
I love this one. I love the humor in it also. An excellent write well done. (Thumbs up)
Re: only you by celticskatermatt1	CherokeeRoseLoggins 71.31.231.183	30-Jun-06/8:27 AM
What a lovely heartfelt tribute to a loved one. Good construction and rhyme. An excellent write. (Thumbs up) May I make a suggestion? And no ill intent meant here. Capitalize and commas. capitalize the first word of the beginning of each verse, a comma after the first verse, a period after the second verse, etc. And capitalize your i's, as in (I close my eyes) and ill wake up (I'll) Still an excellent write. (A wink and a smile at you.)
Re: How to Bleed by MacFrantic	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	30-Jun-06/7:33 AM
A giant globule of spittle or the moist lips of an accountant attending an course on the new Sarbane-Oxley Rules.
Re: a comment on A Little War Victim by amanda_dcosta	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	30-Jun-06/7:15 AM
yuck.
Re: How to Bleed by MacFrantic	Dovina 12.72.36.154	30-Jun-06/6:36 AM
This starts out really great, like a poem that would move me. But when I get to "But never stray, Never bleed alone," the magic stops. How do you not bleed alone unless your cuts are intentional and in company of someone? The last three lines are good. Put something catchy between the good start and the good ending and this could be really good.
Re: a comment on COCK by Stephen Robins	Stephen Robins 213.146.148.199	30-Jun-06/2:34 AM
What the hell or you one about you visually impaired mess. If we are to enter into a frank exchange of views I would have to remark that your poetry suffocates the essence of being alive and replaces it with the smell of rotting flesh. It is better to have withered than to still be stretching your skin, especially in the vacinity of your corpulent thighs.
Re: moving on by Jigg	Ranger 86.131.59.63	30-Jun-06/12:43 AM
Typo line 6 - 'were', I think you mean. But the grammar isn't very user-friendly there so it could be that you meant 'where'. Not very clear though. It's pretty much all over the place here, things don't follow too logically. But then I suppose that's not surprising given stanza one. Fair enough, I guess. 'Back of head met brick' is great, but it would have cracked me up if it had been 'back of head met Chewbacca'.