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comfort (Free verse) by the indign this is where the comfort grows,
blossoms into something new.
the beauty of the princess smile
beaming, shining, calming, soothes,
makes bright the stormy, darkening night
and shares a perfect warmth.
a whole new world hides behind a veil
that only love can lift;
masks a realm of wonderment that can be found
only together.
takes a wonder, builds a dream,
gives all the world away;
hold out your hands and you may hold
this perfect jubilant.
Up the ladder:
Bad grammar and spelling mistakes
Down the ladder:
The pale hand of a lady on my arm
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Posted: June 25, 2006 6:07 PM PDT; Last modified: June 25, 2006 6:07 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.119203 Overall Rank: 5923 Comments:
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amanda_dcosta @ 202.164.138.126
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30-Jun-06/8:42 AM
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This is pretty good. I would also like it if you'd use upper case letter whereever necessary. I like the theme you chose and how you've presented it.
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