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watch

Member since 2004 · Posted 27 Jun 2006 · 1 comment

let us, you and me and i, go watch the summerset glare upon the olive trees' leaves that dance so carelessly in air. the orange glow it cast upon the still waters out at bay, bathing down upon us, wiping all our cares away, sings a brilliant song in notes of pink that fade away to gray as dusk begins to nip and scare the light away. i feel the earth hum its lullaby, listen as it grows to full euphony of starlight gaze that shine so brilliant in the snow. the quiet of the cool breeze whispers all we care to hear - behold this beauty as it unfolds before us; so close, so near.

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[8] CherokeeRoseLoggins 29-Jun-06/12:07 AM Reply
A very good write. Good construction, and rhyme. Needs some captializing on a few words, otherwise, an excellent write.