only you

Member since 2004 · Posted 23 Jun 2006 · 2 comments

i close my eyes and dream of you and hope this wish will come true one day ill wake up and youll be there with your hands combing through my hair but for now my dear i cant wait till your arms open up that lovely gate of warmth and your loving soft voice so i came to conclusion and made a choice your the only thing that i miss and i hope this dream will end with a kiss.

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[8] CherokeeRoseLoggins 30-Jun-06/8:27 AM Reply

What a lovely heartfelt tribute to a loved one. Good construction and rhyme. An excellent write. (Thumbs up)

May I make a suggestion? And no ill intent meant here. Capitalize and commas. capitalize the first word of the beginning of each verse, a comma after the first verse, a period after the second verse, etc. And capitalize your i's, as in (I close my eyes) and ill wake up (I'll) Still an excellent write. (A wink and a smile at you.)

[9] leonxic 1-Jul-06/3:30 AM Reply

Hi Matt.
Listen to CherokeeRoseLoggins, or else.