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only you (Free verse) by celticskatermatt1 i close my eyes and dream of you
and hope this wish will come true
one day ill wake up and youll be there
with your hands combing through my hair
but for now my dear i cant wait
till your arms open up that lovely gate
of warmth and your loving soft voice
so i came to conclusion and made a choice
your the only thing that i miss
and i hope this dream will end with a kiss.
Up the ladder:
Golden Sands
Down the ladder:
Loves Struggle
Votes: (green: user, blue: anonymous)
Arithmetic Mean: 5.6666665
Posted: June 23, 2006 10:15 PM PDT; Last modified: June 23, 2006 10:15 PM PDTWeighted score: 5.0794687 Overall Rank: 6470 Comments:
Hi Matt.
Listen to CherokeeRoseLoggins, or else. 206 view(s)
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May I make a suggestion? And no ill intent meant here. Capitalize and commas. capitalize the first word of the beginning of each verse, a comma after the first verse, a period after the second verse, etc. And capitalize your i's, as in (I close my eyes) and ill wake up (I'll) Still an excellent write. (A wink and a smile at you.)