Re: a comment on Goliath by amanda_dcosta	amanda_dcosta 202.164.138.126	2-Jul-06/10:01 AM
Thanks DA. and sorry I couldn't chat with you.
Re: 72 virgins (but the bitches ain't fun) by ALChemy	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 86.137.88.190	2-Jul-06/7:29 AM
I'd be more worried about the 72 mothers-in-law.
Re: Goliath by amanda_dcosta	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 86.137.88.190	2-Jul-06/7:18 AM
Yeah good analogy. Goliath is big, bad and scary. Lets use him as a metaphor for all the big, bad, scary things in life.
Re: a comment on Goliath by amanda_dcosta	amanda_dcosta 202.164.138.126	2-Jul-06/7:05 AM
Thanks guys. Hope you enjoyed the new outlook to each of our Goliaths.
Re: Southern Baptist Redneck Song by Edna Sweetlove	-=Dark_Angel=-, P.I. 86.137.88.190	2-Jul-06/4:29 AM
What biting satire! I wish I had your talent for picking out such original targets for ridicule. Southern, Bible-bashing rednecks -- it's about time someone took them down a peg or two. It must take a lot of courage to be so controversial. -10-
Re: Goliath by amanda_dcosta	ALChemy 71.75.188.128	2-Jul-06/1:39 AM
This poem remind me of a painting by Goya: http://www.pkimaging.com/pic/mikp/art/goya.colossus.jpg and a lithograph by Goya: http://www.artchive.com/artchive/g/goya/giant.jpg Good take on the Goliath theme.
Re: Sonnet IX by tuthaliash	Ranger 81.158.154.112	1-Jul-06/9:39 PM
Where the hell did this one come from? Superbly archaic in format and technique. Therefore it meets with approval. Only complaint is "Rehash'd"...it just doesn't sound like an old enough word for the piece. Excellent meter.
Re: canada day by Bill Z Bub	Ranger 81.158.154.112	1-Jul-06/9:29 PM
This is magic. I don't get why, though. Maybe it's the spacing, the openness like the sky. I think that's why I want the last word to be 'plain'. Three more lines of description after 'darkest sky' would seem right, somehow. Do you listen to Arrogant Worms? This made me think of their self-penned national anthem, 'Canada Is Really Big'...
Re: Goliath by amanda_dcosta	Ranger 81.158.154.112	1-Jul-06/9:15 PM
Good questions, excellent take on Goliath. It's pretty ironic that the laziness fights so much...I think of it more like a dead weight against which we struggle. The only thing I'd really change here is removing the exclamation mark at the end...they rarely appeal to me in poetry. Others may, of course, disagree.
Re: a comment on Patio 95 by ecargo	Ranger 81.158.154.112	1-Jul-06/8:55 PM
I might as well post it, actually. We lost on penalties, therefore I no longer care for life, let alone poetry.
Re: a comment on Fallen Charub by Dovina	amanda_dcosta 202.164.138.126	1-Jul-06/6:54 PM
Dovina..... you def are in form!
Re: a comment on Fallen Charub by Dovina	Dovina 12.72.36.55	1-Jul-06/12:39 PM
When two dandies date a dame, this is what I call a dandy dating dream. When two dames date a dandy, this is what I call a doggie dragout drudge. When two dandies date two dames, this is what I call a double doctor dandy dating duo.
Re: canada day by Bill Z Bub	Bill Z Bub 69.197.90.12	1-Jul-06/6:30 AM
Yeah not my best work thats for sure. I'm out of practice. But just you wait...
Re: canada day by Bill Z Bub	amanda_dcosta 202.164.138.126	1-Jul-06/5:52 AM
not very impressive to me.
Re: Patio 95 by ecargo	amanda_dcosta 202.164.138.126	1-Jul-06/3:47 AM
e-cargo... where have you been? I missed seeing you on PR. Good to see you around here now.... so howz life been and what's new other than this poem.
Re: only you by celticskatermatt1	leonxic 70.179.130.25	1-Jul-06/3:30 AM
Hi Matt. Listen to CherokeeRoseLoggins, or else.
Re: How to Bleed by MacFrantic	leonxic 70.179.130.25	1-Jul-06/3:22 AM
How delightfully emo.
Re: I'm a faggot by mrs smith	leonxic 70.179.130.25	1-Jul-06/3:18 AM
That's cute.
Re: a comment on Fallen Charub by Dovina	amanda_dcosta 202.164.138.126	1-Jul-06/2:02 AM
Ranger.... if you're lucky to join in when we do ... we could double date.
Re: Fallen Charub by Dovina	Ranger 86.131.51.97	1-Jul-06/12:16 AM
Heh... another early chuckle. You guys have the humour going today, don't you?