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canada day

Member since 2002 · Posted 1 Jul 2006 · Edited 1 Jul 2006 · 8 comments

I'm alive I'm born at midnight again. premature stars arcing sparks snap across vastness in darkest sky uncountable blessings just beyond the pane.

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8 comments

[4] amanda_dcosta 1-Jul-06/5:52 AM Reply

not very impressive to me.

[n/a] Bill Z Bub 1-Jul-06/6:30 AM Reply

Yeah not my best work thats for sure. I'm out of practice. But just you wait...

[9] Ranger 1-Jul-06/9:29 PM Reply

This is magic. I don't get why, though. Maybe it's the spacing, the openness like the sky. I think that's why I want the last word to be 'plain'. Three more lines of description after 'darkest sky' would seem right, somehow.

Do you listen to Arrogant Worms? This made me think of their self-penned national anthem, 'Canada Is Really Big'...

[8] ecargo 2-Jul-06/12:35 PM Reply

You're alive!

Hiya Mr. Bub. Good to see you.

[n/a] Bill Z Bub › ecargo 4-Jul-06/7:02 PM Reply

Your name isn't familiar.

... INTRANSIT?

[9] Ranger › Bill Z Bub 4-Jul-06/11:56 PM Reply

Right nationality - wrong gender, I think you'll find.

[n/a] Bill Z Bub › Ranger 5-Jul-06/12:57 AM Reply

ok, that was just a wild guess based on the word "cargo".

[5] wilco 5-Jul-06/7:53 PM Reply

The spacing works okay and there's something I like about it...still, just not overly impressed with this one Mr. Devil.