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canada day (Free verse) by Bill Z Bub

I'm alive I'm born at midnight again. premature stars arcing sparks snap across vastness in darkest sky uncountable blessings just beyond the pane.

Ranger 1-Jul-06/9:29 PM
This is magic. I don't get why, though. Maybe it's the spacing, the openness like the sky. I think that's why I want the last word to be 'plain'. Three more lines of description after 'darkest sky' would seem right, somehow.

Do you listen to Arrogant Worms? This made me think of their self-penned national anthem, 'Canada Is Really Big'...




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