Re: Farmhouse, Southern France (storm on arrival) by Ranger	Bobjim 62.252.0.11	28-Sep-06/9:42 AM
Dude! Too many verbs! And no pain or tourture at all? What about making it a love poem? With darkness and shit?
Re: Pain by PoeticJustice	Bobjim 62.252.0.11	28-Sep-06/9:39 AM
OMG!!! I totally feel your pain here dude! Let's like, set fire to shit!!111oneone
Re: Doubtcohol by drnick	Dovina 12.72.43.168	27-Sep-06/9:10 PM
If you take the "c" from the title, it will sound more like "alcohol." Capitals at line beginnings are not consistent. "stays unperturbed" It's a good poem in need of help.
Re: a comment on Attention, This Just In by thepinkbunnyofdoom	Dovina 12.72.43.168	27-Sep-06/8:59 PM
No, it would not. Say the poem is what you think it is. Don't validate her folly by joining it.
Re: a comment on The Dovina Memorial Bike Lane by Dovina	Dovina 12.72.43.168	27-Sep-06/8:51 PM
All you have to do is get angry about something and then devise sour grapes to appease your anger. Thanks for the vote and comment.
Re: a comment on The Dovina Memorial Bike Lane by Dovina	Dovina 12.72.43.168	27-Sep-06/8:49 PM
Thanks for getting back to this. I agree that “whereupon” is too long and legal. I’ll change it to “where its need was realized.” The used-abused decision falls, at least to me, to abused, because her act was abuse of her responsibility. Again, let me say that I expect no Edna-countering in anybody’s vote. Please vote as you rate the poem.
Re: a comment on Solving Freud's Conflict (not a weather poem) by nypoet22	nypoet22 65.10.92.48	27-Sep-06/5:29 PM
thanks. it's a cute little pun but i tried to get all the mileage i could out of it. auden was a genius. freud was no slouch either, come to think, though most of the time he was coked off his hiney.
Re: a comment on Las Gaviotas by Bachus	Ranger 62.252.32.15	27-Sep-06/3:46 PM
A holster of chump
Re: Las Gaviotas by Bachus	Ranger 62.252.32.15	27-Sep-06/3:45 PM
So this has been one of my favourite ranker poems for the last year or so, it was the chief inspiration behind every villanelle that I've ever written, and yet I haven't commented or voted on it until now? This is the best vil. on poemranker, and then some. Whenever I think of the form, I always think of this. -10- and favourited.
Re: a comment on Attention, This Just In by thepinkbunnyofdoom	Ranger 62.252.32.15	27-Sep-06/3:39 PM
What if I said 'this poem is awesome' - would that put enough of a gloss over the vote manipulation to excuse my actions?
Re: Solving Freud's Conflict (not a weather poem) by nypoet22	Ranger 62.252.32.15	27-Sep-06/3:28 PM
Excellent.
Re: a comment on Farmhouse, Southern France (storm on arrival) by Ranger	Ranger 62.252.32.15	27-Sep-06/3:27 PM
Not too bad, am back at uni and waiting for it all to kick off again. I can't write at the moment though: I've been spending all my time listening to Hayseed Dixie and my head's so full of bluegrass it's going to explode. Not that it's a bad thing, of course, just a 'phase'.
Re: a comment on Her Eyes by Fayt	Ranger 62.252.32.15	27-Sep-06/3:24 PM
Listen to the patronising rubbish, it'll help you improve.
Re: This, my love is for you by creepshow	Ranger 62.252.32.15	27-Sep-06/3:19 PM
Decent poem about addiction. The title needs a little more punctuation ('This, my love, is for you'). I do hope this is only about something minor, not the chemical evils that abound...
Re: Doubtcohol by drnick	Ranger 62.252.32.15	27-Sep-06/3:15 PM
Damned good, I didn't recognise the rhyme scheme until the second read. Last couplet is a killer; having just walked back through town in the rain I had to laugh at what people were wearing, or I would if I hadn't walked to a club, found a queue longer than a very long piece of string and strolled back again. I meant to leave a message on your blogspace quite recently, actually, but when I got to it I just couldn't think what to write. Are you back at uni, or was last year your finals? If so, what did you finish with?
Re: a comment on The Dovina Memorial Bike Lane by Dovina	Ranger 62.252.32.15	27-Sep-06/3:05 PM
I promised I'd come back and read; now I am in the 'diff and poemranker's accessible, I've read. Good poem! Definitely a nicely underused (if not downright original) idea and it's said so very directly...but without being smug, which is difficult to achieve. It reads very quickly - only two places didn't quite follow for me: 'covertly abused her job' has '-ly' and 'a-' together which interrupted my reading (changing 'abused' to simply 'used' would solve it there) and 'whereupon', which fits but is a bit long. However, I might be reading it *too* fast, in which case most other people probably wouldn't find the issues that I did. Definitely worth a nine, I'm not changing the ten though. If this got a score lower than it deserves, I'd feel guilty.
Re: Farmhouse, Southern France (storm on arrival) by Ranger	drnick 24.176.22.254	27-Sep-06/2:10 PM
What's up, buddy? Just wanted to say hi, I'll be back later to read your poem.
Re: Pain by PoeticJustice	leonxic 129.7.120.229	26-Sep-06/2:30 PM
I think this might be something Keanu Reeves wrote when he was thirteen. I better not criticize this further though; his "anger engulfs him" and that sounds dangerous.
Re: Shadows In Your Eyes by PoeticJustice	leonxic 129.7.120.229	26-Sep-06/1:51 PM
The rhyme and rhythm are very forced. The structure of the poem is almost an afterthought, you might want to consider incorperating them while writing instead.
Re: The Dovina Memorial Bike Lane by Dovina	leonxic 129.7.120.229	26-Sep-06/1:47 PM
If nothing else, the subject matter is completely original. Great idea; wish i'd thought of it.